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Demographic trend in Scotland measured in proportion of birth rate, population growth and death rate


grintdevereaux30 9 / 6 2  
Aug 12, 2016   #1
A change of Demographic trend in Scotland is illustrated in the line graph in a 8-decade period from 1940 to 2020 by measured in proportion of birth rate, population growth rate and death rate.

In 1940, the percentage of birth rate was stood at 2.5%, which was the high of the poportion among 3 categories over 8 decades. There was a dropped sharply over 20 years to 1.05% in late 1960. It fell to 0.6% over 30 years. However, a gradual increase was happened from 1990 to 2000 to 0.7%. As envisaged, it will be dropped gradually to 0.45% in the late 2020.

Death rate sharply fell from 1.5% to 0.4% among 1940 and 1955, a diminishing of 0.9% in 15 years. In 5 decades, it fell steadily to 0.2%. While Population growth rate was fluctuatively from 0.9% to 0.95% in 3-decade period. It suddenly fell down and get the levelled off and diminished in the end of 2005. From now and forcast, death rate will be replaced the highest proportion of the people who died in late 2020.

It is clear that the birth rate is the highest number of proportion in Scotland over 7-decade period until 2016 and as predicted still be the highest until late 2018. While the percentage of population growth rate was fluctuatively over 6-decade period, Death rate fell down and suddenly broke the record in late 2020.




akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
A change of Demographic trendS in Scotland is illustrated in the line graph in aN 8-decade period from 1940 to 2020 by measured in proportion of birth rate, population growth rate and death rate. RATES OF A BIRTH PROPORTION, A POPULATION GROWTH, AND DEATH. (I Suggest you shpuld include the overview sentence in the first paragraph beacuse you will fight time. I am afraid that your time is running out, but you do not write the overview. It will reduce your score)

... birth rate was stood at 2.5%, which was (Use Omitting) the high of the proportion ...

Note:
It is good writing grammatically. However, this writing cannot get the score more than 6 since you write safely. I mean that you have only described data like listing. You need a bravery to compare amongs figures. For example,INITIALLY, WHILE THE PERCENTAGE OF THE POPULATION GROWTH IN SCOTLAND WAS LESS THAN 1%, THE FIGURE OF THE BIRTH SAW ALMOST THREE TIMES AS MUCH.

I believe your ability will increase gradualy if you wanna practice and read examples of writing task 1.
practice more and more...
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