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Describe benefits of owning a home and renting. ielts task2


phuong0296 1 / -  
Oct 14, 2015   #1
Topic: Some people purchase a home and others rent. Describe benefits of owning a home and renting. Compare and construct the two options and explain which you think be better for overseas students.

Finding accommodation while study abroad is as important as finding a school for learning. There are various ways that people can select like purchasing a home, renting an apartment, homestay or living in a hall of residence on campus. Each choice has its own advantages and disadvantages. However, for overseas students living in a house off campus, owning a home is better than renting because of cost and relationship.

The first reason that buying a house is better than renting in finance. Whereas, if overseas students purchase, they must to pay once, living in an apartment, they do not. People pay periodically as a month, two months, or three months. Studying in foreign, students will face a new life, there are a variety things that payment. Therefore, personal house is quite luxary and expensive while renting flat is more suitable for students.

Another reason for purchasing a home compared to renting is relationship. Whereas living in a rented apartment, overseas students learn way to live with other people, living in a owning house do not. They meet many people coming from different nations and talk about the culture in their country together. Therefore, undergraduate can communicate better than students who buying a house. In addition, students frequently exchange of learning method, and help each other to progress. Generally, renting a home is a great opportunity to make new friends.

In conclusion, living in a rented apartment is suitable like cheap cost and good relationship for students studying abroad than buying a home.

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bro2143328 1 / 1  
Oct 14, 2015   #2
In the first paragraph you state the owning is better: However, for overseas students living in a house off campus, owning a home is better than renting because of cost and relationship.

While in the conclusion you state that renting is better: In conclusion, living in a rented apartment is suitable like cheap cost and good relationship for students studying abroad than buying a home.

Additionally, the English grammar and mechanics seem to be a bit off: Studying in foreign, students will face a new life, there are a variety things that payment. Therefore, personal house is quite luxary and expensive while renting flat is more suitable for students.

Perhaps try- When a student moves to study in a foreign Country the student's will often struggle with finding employment to support the payment for housing. Housing is necessary and options should be thoroughly considered before the move is made. If purchasing a home is out of the question, perhaps renting would be the next best option.

I hope that this helps!

Brooke from Arizona.
db723 5 / 7 1  
Oct 14, 2015   #3
However, for overseas students living in a house off campus, owning a home is better than renting because of cost and relationship.
In conclusion, living in a rented apartment is suitable like cheap cost and good relationship for students studying abroad than buying a home.


Your introduction and conclusion is a paradox.
By reading the body paragraphs, I think you agree with renting, but the ideas are not clear. It is better to show it at first.

Thanks


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