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Describe what you will be doing in the next 5 year and in the next 10 year


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Jul 25, 2022   #1

my future in 5-10 years



When I realized I got used to diving into an adult's world, I started thinking about who am I in the next 5 year and even in the next 10 year. To be honest, the biggest thing I pursue is Education. I think this is a large field that I have to become a part of it.

Since highschool time, I feel my country's education has some dilemmas. My teachers impact me so much that I have to be a specialist guy in class to receive their attention. That is a problem. Because I realized that we must be changed from a specialist guy to a generalist. I do not want education is a place where teachers "teach" their students about something but I want education to become a space which can evoke the beauty of each individual and promote that beauty.

This is the reason I am on my way to finding my partners to create a community where children can learn from a liberal environment and especially I want to give the worthy knowledge to poor children. Nowadays, we know many organizations which can contribute facilities and help give education for them but two things for education I want to "build up" for a child are mental stability and developing EQ. Because I believe that intelligence grows a lot from experience, and experience only learns from failures. We often do not learn experience from success.

I am imagining my future in the next 5 and 10 year right now and I feel pressure and excited. In the next 5 year my community for children will being launched. The reason I feel pressure is that I must find out how to keep that "fire" in myself and even in my partners to always be ready to "wake up" inside our children. I know many projects or organizations give children a bunch of important lessons, however it just works in a short term. Therefore, it is not my criteria for education. I believe that we can boost students' creativity and help them be more courageous in the path that they are taking. The first principle is that our community is not a school where we can easily see tables, chairs, chalkboards, and teachers who stand at the center of the class lecturing the students. We should think outside of the box and in our community students become the center of the classroom discussing ideas with their peers under the facilitation or under the supervision of what we call a mentor or a facilitator. And in the next 10 years, I believe our community will be extended and benefited with any Vietnamese children. Whatever major I choose, I want to help children in my country to catch up with education in the world.
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Jul 25, 2022   #2
The essay is too scattered in focus. The writer must not work so much on the backstory in a disconnected form from the 5 and 10 year plan. He must revise the presentation to allow for the relevant merging of his future plans with the backstory. The backstory cannot comprise more than half this essay. By creating a seamlessly interwoven idea presentation, the 5 and 10 year plans will show the relevance of the difficulties education faces in the applicant's home country.

A new essay must be developed if the writer is to meet the prompt requirements for the application. He must also use a professional editor to help clean up his essay once his new draft is finished. The editor can clean up any problems and misunderstanding that might arise from the ESL writing of the applicant. The writer is not capable of writing a clean English application essay without professional help.


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