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Describe a film/movie you would like to share with your friends

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Feb 15, 2020   #1

La La Land

Honestly, I am an aficionado of films. I have watched many films in my life and there are so many great ones that I would like to share with my friends. However, I would like to talk about * La La Land * because I was impressed so much by this romantic movie. The movie was surrounded by two main characters namely Sebastian and Mia. Sebastian has a strong passion for jazz music in contrast with Mia. They met each other out of the blue while they were struggling in Los Angeles traffic. After many incidents, they fall in love with each other. However, they all have to pursue their dreams. They get into an argument, Mia said to him that He was abandoning his dream while Sebastian thinks that she just love him when he didn't have a job. The climax of this film was when Sebastian misses her plays that she put a great effort on. At last, they were all successful with their dreams, Mia has a happy family but not with Sebastian. It was such a very sad ending that everyone cant anticipate. There are many reasons why I choose this movie to share with myfndsire. First, the movie conveys a meaningful message that not all love stories have a happy ending. Also, this film grabs my attention with the outstanding performance of the actors and all the songs in this movie. I hope that my friends will enjoy this movie like me

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Feb 15, 2020   #2
Spoiler Alert! You were being asked to do a movie review, without telling the whole story of the movie. When you describe a movie that you like to your friends, don't delve so much into the story specifics. Talk about the acting, the background, the haunting music that sets up the scenes, never give away the full plot of the story. If you do that, then you won't be enticing your friends to see the movie. Additionally, you won't just be describing the movie, you will be telling the story. Hence the spoiler alert comment at the start.

With regards to your grammar and punctuation, I found several problem points. You are not careful about how you write the words you use. What is "myfndsire"? I believe you meant to say, "my friends"? Review your subject verb agreement rules when it comes to writing sentences. "Sebastian thinks that she just love him " is wrong. "Sebastian thinks she just loveS him" is correct. Also "cannot" is a word that is written as "can't" in short form. However, it would be best for you to avoid using contractions in writing (cannot, did not) so that you can get used to writing in a formal manner at all times.

You wrote well enough in this essay when you consider that you were able to express yourself in a manner that could easily be understood by others. Add to that, the way that you were able to retell the story clearly, even though the language used was not perfect or accurate at certain times. Keep writing. You can only get better from here.

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