leisure time activities
Hello everyone. I am delighted to be here today to tell you about activities which I usually do in my leisure time. Except the study time, I usually have some relaxing activities. I like listening to music or the radio, reading books and to adding subtitles to videos. These things help me relax and feel cheerful. It takes me one hour a day to listen to Chinese radio stations because it is so interesting and useful for me. I can improve my listening skill a lot. Besides, I also go to book coffee usually. Coming there, I can listen to music as well as read my favorite books. I plan to read one book a month. I like coming there alone because I feel comfortable and peaceful. I also like adding subtitles to videos. Adding subtitles is a quite hard job because I have to spend lots of time and effort for it but I am acquainted with some friends on the Internet. They are so enthusiastic and they help me a lot. I also have a channel on Youtube where I update the videos subtitled by myself. This job makes me very happy. Thanks for listening. See you later.
It's good enough, so I don't have much advice to correct it, but I have some suggestions for you if you want a higher score.
- You should try to write more words. Your essay is just too short and not strong enough.
-there're some mistakes such as:
Except -->Except for Coming there -->Coming here Holt Educational Consultant - / 13,223 4319
This essay is not good enough. It has grammar structure problems. You are confused about when you should use the term "come" and "coming". In this instance, the term you should have used was "going". What is the difference? It all lies in the word meaning:
come - to move or journey to a vicinity with a specified purpose
coming - an act or instance of arriving
going - advance toward an objective
Here is an example of word usage for the three words:
Come - I have the money. Come here to get it.
Coming - I am coming. Just wait for me at the house.
Going I am going to to the coffee shop to have some coffee and read a book. I like going there alone.
Is book coffee the name of a particular place you like to go to? If it is, then you should capitalize the name as it is a proper noun and falls under the proper noun usage guidelines.
You also have instances in this statement where you use a connecting word when it is not required. Such as when you said " Adding subtitles is a quite a hard job." I should have been; "Adding subtitles is a hard job." in order to make a clear statement of fact.
There are other problems in grammar usage with this essay that I simply cannot correct in one post. One piece of advice though, try using a grammar checker such as Word 2016 or online grammar checkers in order to spot the spot the mistakes you made and how to correct them.
Hello everyone. I am delighted to be here today to tell you about the activities which I usually do in my leisure time.
Coming there,(there is an error) I can listen to music as well as read my favorite books. I plan to read one book a month. I like coming there (error) alone because I feel comfortable and peaceful.
It's better using verb stay instead of come in your sentences.