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"Describe a person that inspires you in your career path". Write approximately 150 words.


brooch_stone 1 / 1  
Mar 18, 2015   #1
Hi everyone! Please help me to check and correct my paragraph! Thank you very much!

V... H., who is one of my friends and everyone call ViHa, motivates me to choose my future career. From head to foot, he is not so good-looking but extraordinary. He is rather portly with the weather-beaten complexion. He has a big round face and a flat nose. He wears a pair of nice blue plastic glasses to cover his neither too big nor too small, brown eyes. His hairstyle is crew-cut with the short wavy black hair. The most attractive point he has is a bright, charming smile.

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Komank Sukarma 4 / 12  
Mar 18, 2015   #2
hello... I enjoyed read your descriptive text above.
I just realized that you wrote 166 words as well. Good job!
because I myself experienced in writing assignment could not control very well to have limit the words number given.
I also got some new vocabularies of your paragraph and it enhanced my knowledge. Thank you.
Keep spirit up buddy!


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