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Describe table - companies advertising expediture IELTS task1


sweetheart87 11 / 32  
Feb 3, 2011   #1
The table below shows a breakdown of companies advertising expenditure in different media sectors in three countries (Australia, South Korea and Brazil). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

write al least 150 words.

The table shows us the advertising expenditure in three different countries namely Australia, South Korea and Brazil.

Tv is the sector with the most expenditure for all the three countries. Australia and Korea invest the same percentage of resources into this means of communication, while Brazil invests nearly twice as much.

Expenditure of Newspaper and radio for Australia and Korea are similar with an average of 22%. Unlike Brazil which spends less money in this two sectors, the percentage of spending in these two sectors is around 15% .

The expenditure of the other systems of communication are different for the three countries. The 30% of the total expenditure of Australia is directed to Internet, Sponsorship and Direct Mail, respectively 15% for the first and 8% for the last two.

Unlike Korea where the 30% of total expenditure are divided respectively in 12% to the both sponsorship and Direct Mail sectors and only 6% to Internet.
Brazile divide the 9% of all spending in these three categories, with only 1% to Direct Mail, 3% to Internet and 5% to sponsorship.

In conclusion the amount of total spent is divided essentially in the first four categories, except Brazil which spend more than half of total expenditure in TV sector.


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ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Feb 4, 2011   #2
- well Ilaria, dont start a para with unlike...its something like u r continuing from a previous sentence and changing the para suddenly....there r some minor grammatical mistakes ...but not so much...overall its good. Just pay attention to sentence structure and how n when to change paragraph. All the best and cheers. Gud luck
OP sweetheart87 11 / 32  
Feb 6, 2011   #3
thanks for your advices!
:)))
EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Feb 10, 2011   #4
Use a comma:

The table shows us the advertising expenditure in three different countries, namely Australia, South Korea, and Brazil.----Actually, I added 2 commas.

And in this case you need a comma on each side of the cause:
Unlike Brazil, which spends less money in this two sectors, the percentage of spending in these two sectors is around 15% .

Again here:
Unlike Korea, where the 30% of total expenditure are divided respectively in 12% to the both sponsorship and Direct Mail sectors and only 6% to Internet, ______ (continue the sentence).

What are you saying above? Unlike Korea, what?
If I start a sentence like this, it has to continue and make it's point: Unlike Korea, where people speak Korean, ___________.

Okay, anyway I am just nitpicking. You are writing very well about a table, and that is always difficult to do!!
OP sweetheart87 11 / 32  
Feb 10, 2011   #5
Susan thank you, thank you so much!!!!
Your advices are usefull!!! :)


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