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Sep 8, 2018   #1

## forest area - diagram analysis

The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

my essay:

The diagram indicates forest area of different districts around the world in 1990, 2000 and 2005.
Apparently, forest area of Oceania is the least and Europe has the largest forest land. We can also find that the area of forest land in South America and Africa decreased a lot from 1990 to 2005.

It is clear that the total area of woods in Oceania in 1990, 2000 and 2005 has never been over 200 millions of hectares which is far less than woods areas of other districts. The area of European forest in 1990, 2000 and 2005 is around 1000 millions of hectares which is the most among all districts.

We can see that in 1990 the forest land area of South America is 946 millions of hectares. However, in 2005 it drops to 882 millions of hectares. African forests were faced with the same issue: from 1990 to 2005, its area went down from 749 to 691 millions of hectares.

stacy422 3 / 4
Sep 9, 2018   #2
You can use some words that are more formal. For example, significantly instead of a lot.
For your last paragragh, I think you can add some more adjectives to enforce that it is dropping immensely.
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Sep 9, 2018   #3
Emma, you need to be precise when it comes to describing the image that is presented to you for analysis. That means, you need to know the difference between a diagram, a chart, a table, and a graph. The graphs come in various forms as well. You need to make sure to use the right descriptive term for the image otherwise you relay wrong information to the reader. What you have here is a table, not a diagram. A diagram is a drawing of a series of instructions for the development of a product or place. You must familiarize yourself with these terms otherwise, you will lose LR points as your vocabulary usage will be incorrect in succeeding essays.

You are lacking another paragraph presentation in this essay. The best scoring is achieved by 4 paragraph presentations composed of 3-5 sentences each. Your paragraphs should have been divided into sentences. What you presented are more of run-on and long sentence presentations, which will have an adverse effect on your GRA score. Take note of these mistakes. Even if you write more than the required 150 words, if you do not follow the correct format, then point deductions can occur based on scoring considerations and rules.

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