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IELTS Task 1 - Describing chart - help me to correct if any mistakes!


carolinenguyen 1 / 1  
Feb 20, 2014   #1
Topic: The table below give information on consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002.(IELTS Cambridge 7 - Writing Task 1)

The table indicates the variation of consumer spending on a series of items of three group: Food/Drinks/Tobacco, Clothing/Footwear and Leisure/Education in the five countries, namely, Ireland, Italy, Spain in 2002.

Firstly, as we can see from the figures above that food, drinks and tobacco were in the most important position on consumer expenditure in all five of the five countries. To be detailed, the percentage of this kind of expenditure was around 30% in Turkey and Ireland while in other three countries, it was under 20%.

Secondly, the group of clothing and footwear took the second significant slot. Especially, Italy consumer spending on clothing/footwear has the highest percentage with 9% while that of Sweden got the lowest percentage with 5.4%.

Finally, expenditure on leisure and education is the least of all three group of items since the table shows that In Turkey, the percentage of consumer spending on leisure and education was highest with only 4.35%.

In conclusion, the figures showed in the above table the divergency of consumer expenditure on various items. The percentage of spending on food, drinks and tobacco was highest whereas that on leisure and education was lowest.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Feb 20, 2014   #2
Where is the diagram? You need to upload it for us to give you more meaningful comments. Use the Attached file(s) feature in the Message block to upload the diagram. :)
OP carolinenguyen 1 / 1  
Feb 20, 2014   #3
I have attached file but I didnt know why It could not display here.
Please refer to this attachment.
Many thanks :)



dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 22, 2014   #4
Hey ... that's too small and not readable at all. You need to enlarge the picture and attach it here :(
The table indicates the variationdetails of consumer spending on a series of items of three group, Food/Drinks/Tobacco, Clothing/Footwear and Leisure/Education in the five countries, namely, Ireland, Italy, Spain in 2002.

You have named only three countries, where are the other 2?
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 22, 2014   #5
I think this good. The data in 2002 you deliver it with simple past.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 16, 2014   #6
In conclusion, the figures showed in the above table the divergency of consumer expenditure on various items. The percentage of spending on food, drinks and tobacco was highest whereas that on leisure and education was lowest.

This is good. However, you'd better have an overview instead of a conclusion. Write your overview paragraph after the introduction. The aim is to provide readers with a clear view of the main trends of the given charts.


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