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IELTS TASK 1 : The design a turbine machine for producing energy from wind


broibra 17 / 19 3  
Nov 19, 2015   #1
The diagrams illustrate the design a turbine machine for producing energy from wind and where it can be placed. Overall, it can be seen that this is the way to generate energy power by using natural source like wind.

To begin, the wind turbine consists of two parts, namely blades and a tower. While the blades are manufactured from either fiberglass or wood and the tower is made from steel. In addition, these parts are connected to a generator which can generate 1.5 megawatts energy power. There are also wind sensor, is installed on the top of generator which can measure the speed and the direction of wind when the blades are turned around by blowing wind. A computer which is nearby the tower can adjust the blades both its direction and its angle based on information from wind sensor.

The wind turbine can be installed in two different places to get maximum result of electrical energy. The wind turbine can be placed on the top of the mountain where the wind blows with maximum strength. Otherwise, other turbine can be set up close by coastline. However, it cannot produce more electrical power because the turbine blades are only spin by slight wind. Finally, the domestic turbine only produce 100 kilowatts of electricity power.




sam2177413 1 / 3  
Nov 19, 2015   #2
To begin, the wind turbine consists of two parts, namely blades and a tower. (discard 'while') While the blades are manufactured from either fiberglass or wood and the tower is made from steel. In addition, these parts are connected to a generator which can generate 1.5 megawatts energy power. (There is also a wind sensor installed on the top of the generator which measures the speed and direction of the blades when turned by the wind) There are also wind sensor, is installed on the top of generator which can measure the speed and the direction of wind when the blades are turned around by blowing wind. (A computer nearby the tower can adjust the blades direction and angle based upon information from the wind senor) A computer which is nearby the tower can adjust the blades both its direction and its angle based on information from wind sensor.

The wind turbine can be installed in two different places to get maximum result of electrical energy. (discard 'the wind turbine' and replace with 'it' since that phrase is said in the prior sentence) The wind turbine can be placed on the top of the mountain (add comma) where the wind blows with maximum strength. Otherwise, (discard 'other') other (make plural) turbine can be set up close (discard 'by' and replace with 'to') by coastline. However, it cannot produce more electrical power because the turbine blades are only spin by slight wind. Finally, the domestic (make plural) turbine only produce 100 kilowatts of electricity power.
afnagteilma 1 / 1  
Nov 22, 2015   #3
Hello! I hope this would help :)

While the blades are manufactured ...

There are ( is) also (a) wind sensor,(which is) is installed on the top ...

... in two different places to get (the) maximum result of electrical energy.
... the wind blows with (its) maximum strength.
... because the turbine blades (were) only spin ...


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