IELTS - despite the obstacles found in the new place, traveller could obtain some new experiences

Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places.
Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places?

Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh them from their daily activities. It is true that people prefer to spend their holiday time in a new and unique place, while others prefer to travel to a famous or common place. Although both choices could bring merits and demerits, I strongly convince that travelling to a new place is always funnier and more challenging than travelling to familiar places.

Most people choose to travel in famous place usually visit such as mall. Indeed, it is more practice; they do not have to prepare heavily due to the fact that it is a common place that you extremely know. On the other hand, travelling in a new and different place will place you in the unpredictable situation. Therefore, people need to be prepare more because those people do not know well yet the situation and condition at that new place.

However, travelling in a new and different place always brings us unpredictable and new experiences, while travelling in a familiar place sounds like a little bit boring trip. Travelling in an unpredictable place indeed will make us more tired, but it is more challenging. Are people having holiday to go out from their daily boring activities? So, I believe that the obstacles found in the new place could bring some wonderful experiences that never be forgotten.

To conclude, despite the obstacles found in the new place, traveller could obtain some new experiences. In addition, people also could explore their knowledge by visiting the place where only a few people live and visit in there. In the other hand, visiting new places in holiday times could outweigh benefits based on my point of view.

Maritsanur, that's great essay so far but I think you could have know continue elaborating on advantages if there are no word limit

Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh them(no need Object here) from their daily activities. It is true that people prefer to spend their holiday time(no need, neither) in a new and unique place, while others prefer to travel to a famous or common place. Although both choices could bring merits and demerits, I strongly convince( I think you should use "agree", "convince" is a strong word, it's hard to use with adverb like "strongly") that travelling to a new place is always funnier and more challenging than travelling to familiar places.

Most people choose to travel in famous place usually visit such as mall(mall? Its like super market ? I don't understand you clearly with this sentence. I think familiar places should be some places they have been there before and it should be a attractive place for tourists, i.e: beach where they have been there for 3 or 4 times, near their places and also famous). Indeed, it is more practice; they do not have to prepare heavily due to the fact that it is a common place that yo u extremely know ( they = you on same situation?). On the other hand, travelling in a new and different place will place you in the unpredictable situation. Therefore, people need to be prepare more ( examples for this will make this sentence clearer) because those people do not know well yet the situation and condition at that new place.

However, travelling in a new and different place always brings us unpredictable and new experiences, while travelling in a familiar place sounds like a little bit boring trip. Travelling in an unpredictable place indeed will make us more tired, but it is more challenging. Are people having holiday to go out from their daily boring activities?( familiar places are not daily places because they need to travel and they are on holiday not weekend)(Also, I think question sentence in here did not convince any thing, you should give more specific examples to make your point clear rather than questions. Furthermore, You should not use question in essay, its five but its too risky) So, I believe that the obstacles found in the new place could bring some wonderful experiences that could never be forgotten. (model verb will be better if you are not 100% sure about that)

To conclude, despite the obstacles found in the new place(2 times for this phrases will never show your vocabulary range, there are many ways to rephrase it with the same idea.) , traveller could obtain some new experiences. In addition, people also could explore their knowledge by visiting the place where only a few people live and visit in there. In the other hand, visiting new places in holiday times could outweigh benefits based on my point of view.

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I hope this will help you. I am a student and I will take IELTS test this Decem. Good luck.

People need to be prepare it would be better if you had chosen between people need to be prepared and people need to prepare.

A closer look at the prompt shows that you are asked to discuss the merits or demerits to visiting new places. However, I do not see that you did it, as it can be seen from the second and third body paragraphs. To justify what I am saying, let's see this


It is rare to see that people spend their free time going to supermarket or shopping centre. Most people prefer going to beach, mountain or other tourism places. Also, this sentence


shows that you failed to define what holiday is, a period of time when you travel to another place for pleasure retrieved from Longman Dictionary What you have written is that you are taking about workers spending their spare time in weekend as to reduce stress at work.

Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh them from their daily activities.

Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh from the hustle and bustle of big lifes