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Will the development of AI will make human labour obsolete

Pham Nguyen 1 / -  
Jan 7, 2022   #1

Will a Robot Take Your Job?

"Will a Robot Take Your Job?" I've recently hit upon this article and interestingly, I found that a heated argument surrounding this issue has already broken out. Some people claimed that AI - which stands for Artificial Intelligence -will take the place of human performance in the foreseeable future while the protestants of the other side of the argument insisted on the indispensability of human roles in the workforce. This writing is aimed to display the mixed reviews of the debaters and individual viewpoints on this matter as a go-between.

In this day and age, it's not difficult to notice that an amazing number of human works has already been automated and a consensus among many experts is that this number is on the increase. Workers in industries ranging from healthcare to agriculture and industrial sectors can all expect to see disruptions in hiring due to AI. This mounting replacement can be ascribed to, according to the specialists, the high efficiency promoted and the large income generated by the machines. They also performed a simple calculation to illustrate this notion by comparing the amount and the quality of the products manufactured by the workers and robots in workplaces. Automobile companies are a satisfactory example, people surely couldn't produce cars that are as aesthetically pleasing, powerful and sophisticated as robots, therefore pale in comparison.

On the other hand, it's also my firm conviction that humans will always be playing a significant and irreplaceable role in the workforce, no matter how innovative machines can become. My outlook to prove this proclamation and oppose the above concept is that we can only implement high-tech machines in certain professions. The medical field, for example, relates directly to human health and life, so we can't leave everything to those technological devices which sometimes can commit errors and cause subsequent harms to the patient. That's why simple robotic surgery still needs the supervision of real surgeons.

To put it bluntly, the necessity of real human labor still outweighs all the state-of-the-art technologies and cannot be completely replaced in many years to come.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,303 3989  
Jan 7, 2022   #2
I assume that this is your response to the general IELTS discussion. I base this observation on the way that you are tackling the topic using the standard that discussion pornat and the fact that this IS an IELTS essay topic. Which leads me to qquestion why you altered the topic presentation by saying you recently read the article and, that you are going to be discussing the mixed reviles and individual viewpoints. This is a general discussion of your personal opinion so your estatement + response already fail due to the incorrect approach to the original presentation. The important thisis statement is missing. What is your opinion?

The reasoning aspect can only recieve a scoring consideration for the part that says

My outlook to prove this proclamation

as this is the only prompt discussion compliant part. Sadly, it will not be enough for the essay to recieve a passing consideration.

Remember the Golden Rules for IELTS Task 2 writing:
- Never change the restatement topic and offer a personal opinion when implied.
- Always focus on the personal opinion defense unless otherwise specified.

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