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The developments along Olive Drive before and after the construction of new facilities 1980-2010


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Nov 19, 2021   #1

IELTS ACADEMIC-WRITING TASK 1- MAP- QT



The two maps below show the developments along Olive Drive before and after the construction of new facilities between 1980 and 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons
where relevant.


The two pictures illustrate the transformation of Olive Drive after a renovation between the years 1980 and 2010.

It is clear that there were a lot of significant changes around Olive Drive: more facilities and buildings constructed.

Looking at the map closely, one can see that a lot of houses were erected in front of the park to the northwest, and a new school was added on the right side of the resident area.

Most of the remarkable developments were on the opposite side of the Olive Drive road. The shops which were in the bottom left corner were completely pulled down for a shopping center and a supermarket. Moreover the bank near the shops was removed and replaced with a cafe. Finally, the size of the community centre was reduced to open a bank. However, in the south-eastern part of the town there was an existence of a hospital.[R][G][/G][/R]





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Nov 20, 2021   #2
The writer opted to identify the changes based on the year representations of the urban plan and design presentations. Yet, he does not use any differentiation tools when discussing the image content per paragraph.This is the greatest inaccuracy in this report presentation. As there are 2 images, the first image must identify itself as being from 1980. The second paragraph image should hold a 2010 topic sentence as well.

The second paragraph should enumerate or describe the ouginal set-up, with particular attention paid to the areas that will have upcoming changes. That way, a comparative second paragraph basedon notable changes can be undertaken.

The current presentation offers a correct comparison but, is rendered useless by the lack of proper identifying markers.


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