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The diagram ilustrates how to make chocolates and the pie chart describes the price of chocolate bar


ayulia 3 / 8 1  
Dec 15, 2014   #1
[/b]Question :
The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is devided up among those involved in the process.[b]


Answer :
The diagram ilustrates how to make chocolates and the pie chart describes the price of chocolate bar according to 5 factors that they are involved in the process and is measured in per cents. Overall, it can be seen that cocoa can be produce to 2 kinds of products and the biggest proportions in price of chocolate bar are cost of ingredients and overheads and supermarket. However, the others factors also get involved in the price.

To begin with the prosedure to make chocolate, first, put the cocoa in the cocoa grinding. This process will deliver some waste as their residues. Then, pour the cocoa with some ingredient in chocoa liquor. This 2 process is same in making both chocolate bar and chocolate powder. To make chocolate powder, next, using a pressing machine, press the cocoa down and force out any excess water. This step produces 2 product of chocoa, chocoa butter and chocoa powder. While cocoa butter is sent to industrial chocolate to make chocolate bar, chocoa powder is delivered to food industry as the raw material in some foods. To make chocolates bar, after the process in chocoa liquor, the cocoa is poured with sugar, chocoa butter and other ingredients in industrial chocolate. Finally, the cocolate bar is made after the last process.

A closer look at the figure reveals that the percentage of ingredients price and overheads and supermarket where they are get the biggest proportions are almost the same. The number are 37% and 34%. The tax and chocolate company, however, there is a less than a fifth of chocolate bar price that is devided up to. In contrast, the farmer as the person who produce the raw materials of chocolates get the lowest proportion in chocolate bar price. It gives just a very small number.



ruwchii 6 / 18 3  
Dec 16, 2014   #2
The diagram ilustrates

it should be illustrates

it can be seen that cocoa can be produce to 2 kinds of products

you should use present participle for the word 'produce' because the sentence is in passive voice, so it would be 'cocoa can be produced' , while there is no need to add -s to the word 'kind' because the number '2' refers to products.

there are still a lot of errors in your writing whether the words are misspelled or the structure of your sentences.
I suggest you to review your writing first before posting it in forum.


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