IELTS TASK I: Diagram of manufacturing tea (using both traditional and modern methods)

fardan10 18 / 25

Apr 7, 2016 #1

The presented diagram depict about two kinds of phases for producting black tea. Overall, it can be seen that although has different purpose, both traditional and modern methods involve fermentation process in manufacturing tea.

To begin with, collecting stage is aimed to select the best quality of tea leaves through only pick bad and 2 the top leaves. And then, when stepping to the withering stage, the selected leaves will be spread out on the rack and air passed through leaves so as to reduce 60 percent of moisture.

Turning to the traditional method works operates by rolling and crushing tea leaves, while modern method by cutting, tearing, and curling tea leaves. In oxidation process, enzymes and air are mixed and change the colour of leaves to be copper. Afterwards, it dried by frying in the oven or by hot air dryers. Following that, it results aroma and flavour of leaves and remove 97 percent of moisture.

Diandin16 9 / 10

Apr 7, 2016 #2

my alternative is :

Firstly, the female farmer collecting fresh tea leaves and picks only the two top leaves and the bud of ensure a high quality tea. Then, all leaves will be withered on rack by air, where leaves are spread out and air is passed through them to reduce 60 % of moisture. In traditional methods, leaves will be rolled flat and chipped followed by the release of enzymes. To compare in modern technique, leaves will be cut,torn and then curled which results to create smaller granular pieces. then, in fermentation steps, enzymes and air are mixed. In the final stage, hot air dryers are used to get the copper color leaves dry which results the total of 97% moisture out by release of flavor and aroma from them.

justivy03 - / 2,366

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Apr 7, 2016 #3

Hi Muh, I can see that you have been presented a very comprehensive suggestion here from an EF contributor, I have a few suggestions I would like to add, please find below;

- depict ~~about~~ two kinds
- of ~~phases for producting~~process of producing black tea.
- it has a different purpose,

-the collecting stage

- worker s operates by
- while the modern
- method is by cutting,
- it is dried
- it ~~results~~gives this aroma

Muh, the corrections above are a just minor setbacks in your analysis but overall, it is a fairly written analysis and I hope this is useful in your revision, in cases like this, you have to make sure that you use the right words base on the given drawing or diagram, such as "phrase" instead of "process", this affects the overall understanding of the analysis so be mindful.