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The diagram presents Manufacturing Process of Bricks


Anhy chan 12 / 23 1  
Apr 27, 2017   #1
The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

How brick is made



The diagram illustrates about the several stages for brick manufacturing process. Overall, there are seven steps to do which is started from clay-digging process and end up with distributing process.

The process is begun by taking clay in the ground by digger, then the process is continued with mixturing process. In this stage, the clay that has been sortered in metal grid then mixtured by roller. When material has been solid and calix, sand and water are added since then it ready for forming process.

At the brick-forming process, there are two method as choices, they are conventional method by mould and modern method by spesific shaper tool. Next is driying process by oven. In this stage, the bricks should be dried up to 48 hours to make the material compact. After that, the bricks are going to cooling chamber for reducing their temperature from oven heating tn the previous stage. In the last step, the bricks are ready to distribute, but before it, the peckaging process should be done perfectly.

Diahkn93 6 / 9  
Apr 27, 2017   #2
how are you @Anhy chan

i read your writing, which is very good. the way you explain is clear but remember for diagram task like this you will get high score if you using passive voice.

secondly i found many misspelling such as mixturing, sortered, driying it should be mixture, sorted, drying.
i really like your overview its short but tell everything
but don't need to worry.. you have a good point keep going you will be get high score :)


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