The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (I have attached picture to use in this essay already.)
energy from biomass
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The diagram show a process for producing electricity for home use which is based biomass such a leaves, food scraps, etc. The fuel from this process is methane is know in part of natural gas. This system consists of gas generating, gas compressing, fuel combusting, electricity generating and electrical storage that would be able to fit into a provided space. In addition, each part is connected by pipes and cables.Electricity is produced using methane gas, created from fermentation between compost and water in a large steel tank. The gas has been collected before it is sent to compressor for increase concentration that enhancing combustion efficiency in the next part. Having been transferred to a combustion engine which in turn produces mechanical energy, it is then changed into electrical energy by generator. After this stage the electricity is stored in a battery, which is discharged to using when out of fuel source.Hi Thirakorn,
Welcome to EssayForum :)
This is the right place for you to practice writing, particularly in IELTS writing. We are here to help you achieving a better result. The detailed descriptions below are my contributions towards your writing. I hope you can consider this as valuable guidance for your future practices.
First of all, you need to know that in IELTS writing task 1, candidates are suggested to write in proper paragraph structures. Your essay has only a single paragraph which is inadequate to fulfill the requirement of band 6 or above. Even, I might say this essay can be 4.0. Thus, my suggestion is that you need to write at least 3 paragraphs in this type of essay. The first paragraph would be introductory paragraph, the second and third paragraph would be body paragraphs.
Moreover, in introductory paragraph, you need to write at least 3 sentences. It consists of paraphrase of the question (1st sentence), and overview of the general views / main features in the essay (2nd and 3rd sentences). This can possibly become a strong introductory paragraph. Then, in body paragraphs, you need to use a proper grouping. You need to separate / split / divide the information into some parts (preferably 2 parts). Therefore, you can write the first part of the information in the second paragraph, and the second part of the information as the third paragraph.
However, an optional way to write an overview is by putting it either in the introduction paragraph or the last paragraph. My suggestion is that it is better to put in in the beginning of the paragraph. This is suggested to avoid ruining your time management. You need to remember that you also need 40 minutes to work on IELTS task 2.
Hope this helps :)
