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Task1: The diagram below shows the process of milk production


hahahazh 1 / 1  
Jan 12, 2020   #1

The diagram shows the stages in the process of milk production


Overall, it is evident that the whole process involves 5 primary steps, starting from cows is grazed and ending with milk products.
Milk comes from the dairy cows, which are grazed in the farms. Firstly, once mature, the dairy cows will be came to a milking machine that is repeated twice a day. This is followed by milk is stored in refrigeration storage before milk tanker daily delivery to dairy. Next in the factory milk, milk is converted to cheese, cream and butter or pasteurized and packaged. Finally, packaged milk will be shown to sell in supermarkets and shops.



Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,700 3784  
Jan 12, 2020   #2
The explanatory essay that you have written will not get a passing score. It is only 99 words long. The requirement is at least 150 words for this essay. Therefore, the score will be an automatic fail. You have not written enough words to prove English comprehension, vocabulary, and writing skills that could qualify you for studies abroad. At this point, I cannot continue reviewing your essay because of the lack of word requirement. Try to write the same essay again. This time, make sure to meet the 150 word requirement. If you can, aim to write 175 words. That will be ample enough to assess your English comprehension, vocabulary, and writing skills.
OP hahahazh 1 / 1  
Jan 12, 2020   #3
@Holt
Thanks for your help. I will try harder.


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