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'a diary in English' - TOEFL optional essay - English ability


mafia 2 / 2  
Dec 29, 2009   #1
(Optional) Share any information that you think is important in the evaluation of your application, including any concerns you think the Admissions Committee may have regarding your application. (500 word maximum)

Although in TOEFL I only got 97, a lower score than average 104, I am confident that my English improved a lot after a fall semester in University of ***

Firstly, I talked to my conversation partner and some other friends in college ministry every oftenï┼║┬îimproving my spoken English. My conversation partner was an MBA student in University of ***, so what we talked about varied from his previous work experience in finance industry to culture difference between US and China. We also spent several weeks on discussing our business plan to import cheap ATV from China. With his help, I made rapid progress in spoken English, even business talk. He still keeps in touch with me through phone now, saying that I am much easier to understand now than before. At the same time, I came to conversation club in college ministry once a week. I met people from different countries in the club and tried to imitate native speakers' pronunciation and intonation. I talked value, trust and justice with people from different countries, practicing organizing and expressing my thoughts in English quickly. So my ability to speak English is undoubted.

Secondly, I earned A in all the finance related courses when I was in University of ***, showing that I can understand English text and lecture very well. In the class, I could not only understand the lecture very well but also communicate with professors by answering their questions and even pointing out their mistakes. In addition, I adapted quickly to Southern American English, indicating that my language sense is good. After class, I read supplement materials on the website such as Bloomberg and even in the journals like Journal of Financial Economics and Journal of Finance. I believe that English won't be my academic hurdle if I study in ***

Thirdly, I have done a lot of work to improve my writing English. Although in *** writing essay and assignment in English was a piece of cake for me, I decided to do something to improve my writing skill. So I took Intro to College Writing. It was a big challenge for me because I had to compete with other classmates, whose native language was English. Although at last I only got B, in this course I learned a lot of valuable knowledge such as MLA style format, which would be very useful in future graduate academic writing. Moreover, I went to the writing center for professional advice and gradually knew American writing culture as well. To practice more, I kept a diary in English .At present, I feel excited about writing in English and using the new words or sentences I learned from English newspaper.

In short, I believe communication in English won't be a big issue if I come to ***

zahras93 1 / 20 2  
Dec 30, 2009   #2
Firstly, I talked to my conversation partner and some other friends in college ministry every often´╝îimproving my spoken English.

I spoke to my conversation partner and friends at College Ministry very often, thus improving in English orally.

so what we talked about varied from his previous work experience in finance industry to culture difference between US and China.

We spoke over various topics that ranged from his previous work experience in a Finance industry to the cultural differences between the US and China.

He still keeps in touch with me through phone now, saying that I am much easier to understand now than before.

We still remain in contact through phone calls where he encourages and motivates by telling me how much progress i have made.

At the same time, I came to conversation club in college ministry once a week. I met people from different countries in the club and tried to imitate native speakers' pronunciation and intonation. I talked value, trust and justice with people from different countries, practicing organizing and expressing my thoughts in English quickly. So my ability to speak English is undoubted.

I also joined a Conversation Club in College Ministry around the same time. We had discussions over value, trust and justice with members from different regions of the world. Thus I had mastered how to practice, organize and express my own thoughts in English. Hence my ability to speak the English language is undoubted.

Secondly, I earned A in all the finance related courses when I was in University of ***, showing that I can understand English text and lecture very well. In the class, I could not only understand the lecture very well but also communicate with professors by answering their questions and even pointing out their mistakes. In addition, I adapted quickly to Southern American English, indicating that my language sense is good. After class, I read supplement materials on the website such as Bloomberg and even in the journals like Journal of Financial Economics and Journal of Finance. I believe that English won't be my academic hurdle if I study in ***

Secondly, I scored an A in all the finance related courses I took. This shows that I can understand English text and lectures. In class, not only did I comprehend ever word the professor spoke, I communicated with him by answering questions and pointing out mistakes. It didn't take me much time to adapt to South American English. After class, I would read... and in journals such as Journal of Finance...

Thirdly Finally, I have done a lot of work to improve enhance my writing written English. Although in *** writing essays and assignments in English was a piece of cake for me, I decided to do something to improve my writing skill further more. So I took Intro to College Writing. It This was a big challenge for me because as I had to compete with other classmates, whose native language was English. Although at last I only got scored a B in this course, I learned a lot of valuable knowledge such as MLA style format, which would be very useful in future graduate academic writing. Moreover, I went to the writing center for professional advice and gradually knew learned American writing culture as well. To practice more, I kept wrote a diary in English. At present, I feel excited about writing in English and using the new words or sentences I learned from every English newspaper I read.

Good Luck
OP mafia 2 / 2  
Dec 30, 2009   #3
thank you very much:)


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