Timothy Ihrig says that the American way of life faces the threat which is health expenditures. The expenditures occupy 15 percent of the GDP in the United States of America, but health care system is located 37th within 50 countries and other nations rank higher than this country as far as quality and value. He suggests improving patient experience, the population health and decreasing per capita expenditure across a continuum. In another view, palliative medicine enables us to live as human beings and change for the better.
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says SAID (this happens in the past, (...) faces the threat which is ABOUT health expenditures.
... in the United States of America, but A health care system is located ...
suggests SUGGESTED improving A patient experience, ...
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Timothy Ihrig says that the American way of life ...
===> to make a good sentence, you need to use appositive.
eg. Timothy Ihrig, the speaker of TED talk video, the American way of life faces the threat which is health expenditures.
the American way of life faces the threat ...
===> the life style of American
health care system is located 37th
===> health care system is located at 37th
but health care system is located 37th within 50 countries ...
maybe what you try to say is :
===>the American health care system was ranked 37 out of 50 countries where the other country takes the higher place.
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Hi Naoki, below are further suggestions to your summary.
- but the health care system
- rank higher
than this country as far
- as it's quality and value is concerned .
- He suggests improving a patient's experience,
population health of the population
andis decreasing per capita
There you have it Naoki, I hope the above remarks are helpful.
Overall, your essay is very brief, as it is a summary, of course. However, for future writing reference, mind the overall construction of the sentence, keep it strong all through out the essay and create a streamline of ideas as well as focus towards the goal of the writing project.
Hi Naoki, I'd like to suggest you additional correction.
The expenditures occupy 15 percent of the ...
====>The authority in the USA allocates 15 percent budget of total GDP in health expenditure.
but health care system is located 37th...
====> but the health care system is located at 37th...
He suggests improving patient experience, the ...
====> He suggested to improve a patient experience, the health of the population and reduce per-capita income across a continuum.