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The differences in ownership of technology devices and the number of hours spent doing households

Rosalie Yang 1 / -  
Apr 12, 2022   #1

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts illustrated the differences in ownership of technology devices and the number of hours spent doing households in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall, it can be seen from the charts that the usage of refrigerators for housework was not popular in 1920 while the proportion of these appliances occupied the first rank in 2019. Besides, the amount of time of weekly households reduced dramatically in the period of 100 years.

In 1920, there was only about 3% of households used refrigerators while the percentage using a vacuum was 10 times it. The figure for the usage of washing machines was 40% and increased for a 40-year period. In 1960, this static declined from 70% to 65%, prior to a continuous rise for the rest of this period and reaching 75% in 2019. Meanwhile, the percentage of the usage of households with vacuum cleaners and refrigerators grew generally and in 2019, every family in this country was using those kinds of electrical appliances.

People were likely to spend less time doing their housework. In 1920, the citizen spent 50 hours per week and this figure decreased dramatically to 20 hours in 1960. The time kept declining until it was only 11 hours in 2019.

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Apr 12, 2022   #2
The writer should be able to create a shorter report for these 2 images. Due to the 20 minute writing allowance, the presentation should be less than 200 words, but more than 150 words. Information presented in the essay should also be done within a uniform 3-5 sentence paragraph. No presentation should be comprised of only 2 sentences. These long sentences will affect the GRA score due to the confusing sentence content. Information must be clearly segregated within the paragraph to avoid cohesiveness and coherence errors. These are some of the reasons why the writer should focus on the proper sentence structure presentation comprising simple and complex sentences in the paragraphs.

The summary overview needs to clearly identify the number of images and what sort of graph is involved in the report. This to help the reader create a an imagined but visual representation of the report. An effective report will be represented by an easily visualized data explanation. The result will be a better C+C score.

The writer has used the word "static" incorrectly in this presentation. It does not have the same meaning as the term "statistical". The error in word usage will negatively affect both the LR and GRA scores.

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