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Toefl - Differences between parents' generation and our generation.


sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 17, 2014   #1
Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

"Every generation is smarter than the last one" is self-explanatory phrase in itself. Every generation give something new to the world, our parents' generation offered our generation the understanding of valuing love and humanity, a better version of science and technology, several inventions - e.g luxurious automobiles, organic food and computers. All these contribution by them presented our generation adequate world to live in. However, our generation is level above then theirs because we have better resources and platforms to make our generation better in all the ways.

If we talk about their contribution to humankind, the list would never end. The first and foremost contribution of our parents' generation is, they kept our historical and religious value fresh and acknowledged us about aspects of it. To quote an instance - Across the globe, parents of all religion would be teaching their children the ritual, custom and value fallowed by them in their RELIGION. On the other hand, today's generation is more focused in their advancement then keeping these religious faith and rituals in its ideal form. My grand - father used to offer prayer to god twice in a day and we on the flip side offer our prayer to god once in a week. As it said our family and custom is our identity, in todays' accelerating world our parents generation's this gift is not well taken care by our generation.

On the advancement side, it would be unfair to compare two generation as both of them would have their distinct share in building their generation remarkably well. Our parents' generation invented Mobile phone, which further had been advanced by our generation into smart phones. This incredible difference could be well experienced by people that have used Nokia 3310 and 3315 and now probably using Iphone. Our parents enrolled us in computer institutions to learn computers, we invented hi tech laptops and I - Pads that is merely small in size, but has all features of providing information about all current and previous generations. Further, the enhancement of world will flourished even better by next generations as it is unstoppable.

All - embracing inventions, values and rituals, lessons and experiences of our parents' generation have given us already built empire to make it best for our generation. As it is said change is disliked by many, yet that change is necessary to make the difference, I am glad that my generation invented many significant change to make the difference in the lives of humankind.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 17, 2014   #2
Every generation gives something new to the world, .... very true :)

Every generation give something new to the world, our parents' generation offered our generation the understanding of valuing love and humanity, a better version of science and technology, several inventions - e.g luxurious automobiles, organic food and computers.

In the introduction you should not include examples. Quickly introduce your prompt to the reader and move into body paras where you give reasons and examples.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 18, 2014   #3
Helloooo... I am glad to have you here again :D

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Oops...,
In the previous lesson (Toefl - Advertising can tell you a lot about a country# Mar 14, 2014, 11:19pm), I showed you how to solve comma splice. Remember ? :D

Our parents enrolled us in computer institutions to learn computers, we invented hi tech laptops

This sentence indicates the same problem. To make sure I have abilities to give clear explanations, I'd like to see some samples of your work ;)

I am expecting you...
OP sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 18, 2014   #4
Hey PahanPahan

the introduction you should not include examples. Quickly introduce your prompt to the reader and move into body paras where you give reasons and examples.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 18, 2014   #5
Ok, let's attend to this body para;
you need to start with the feature that you are going to talk about how your parents' generation is different to yours. In this case it is the value system that your parents had. So, let's do it this way;

First, the value system of our parents vastly differed from the values and perceptions of our generation. Our parents were highly influenced by religious and traditional beliefs. They were more concerned about social ethics than us. For example, ?????????? (now give an example)
OP sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 18, 2014   #6
dumi
you need to start with the feature that you are going to talk about how your parents' generation is different to yours. In this case it is the value system that your parents had. So, let's do it this way;

First, the value system of our parents vastly differed from the values and perceptions of our generation. Our parents were highly influenced by religious and traditional beliefs. They were more concerned about social ethics than us. For example, ?????????? (now give an EXAMPLE)

Dhumi bundles of thanks to you - for sparing time for reading, providing helpful suggestion and for making my doubt clear.

Here is one more question i want to ask :-

You suggest - to mention reason or point of explanation in first sentence of our para,right.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 19, 2014   #7
You suggest - to mention reason or point of explanation in first sentence of our para,right.

Yes, that's correct. It helps you tell facts to the reader without wasting his time which the reader would appreciate :) And also it helps you manage time efficiently because your essay would be assessed on the necessary features in your contents (reason is a must feature). One you finish with the reason, then quickly give a specific example to support it.


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