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The differences between rich and poor


LaPolo11 12 / 28  
Apr 3, 2016   #1
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The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What do you think are the main causes of this difference and what do you think can be done to reduce the gap?

Over last decades, the difference between rich and poor create a pretty huge gap between poorer people and rich claim it becomes widening. As such, some people claimed that the predominant causes are materialistic of good and a chattel and human resource. Nonetheless, in my personal view, I believe that the best way to tackle the gap is government should regulate policies for giving easy access to poor children to schools and colleges.

It is undeniable that one of the most renowned and consider as a trending topic world today is the the different between gap of people in terms to the possession on items. It is because inhabitant always compite to earn more than other people. Furthermore, mankind considered money is everything. Other factor can be primarily responsible for the markedly rising difference is educational opportunity for people. People in high level of wealth can afford hig level of education, while people who live in under-poverty con side that it is anaffordable.

To tackle these worrying concerns government have to regulate policies for poor people. Government should provide access to the poor to get educated free of cost. Take China and Japan as a pragmatic instance, these Countries have been facing massive economy demolition, then they realize that to recover their economy, they regained their lost prestige in world by merely improving the level of education and its easy access to common people. As a result, china and japan today have good human resource. Therefore, government play crucial role for reducing a pretty huge gap for their dweller.

The aforementioned evidence show that the emergency of widening gap between the rich and the poor can be contributed to race of owing materialistic matter and lack of education among poor resident. It is imperative that education is one of many ways that can be adopted to lessen the rich and the poor gap which should be regulated and provided by government.

Ester Napitupulu 18 / 25 3  
Apr 3, 2016   #2
Hi Akhan..
The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before.

AssS uch as , some people claimed that the predominant causes are materialistic of good and a chattel and human resource.
behieli 7 / 19 4  
Apr 3, 2016   #3
Dear LaPolo

Over last decades, the difference between rich and poor create ...Over last decades, a huge gap has been created between poor and rich and it is widening.

As such, some people claimed that the predominant ... The predominant cause of this phenomena is materialization of the world and .....(it needs to be explained with more details)

Nonetheless, in my personal view, I believe that the best ... in your view if poor children have access to education the gap between poor and rich will be removed?! how you came to this conclusion? the free education could be one of resolutions but just one of them. However, you started with NONETHELESS so it means you disagree with previous sentence.

In general I think you may think more reasonably about the topic. to be honest, I felt confused reading your essay. maybe it is because that you started with the GAP BETWEEN POOR AND RICH but then you stuck to EDUCATION.

The good thing is you have a good level of vocabulary. just try to use them in more arranged and logical way.


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