Different household spending during 60 years

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

A comparison of the percentage household spending in a country between two different years,1950 and 2010, is illustrated in pie charts. At first glance, it is inevitable that there were significant change in the percentage of household spending at several different sectors. While the percentage of housing expenditure decreased significantly, food spending showed the opposite.

Moving to detailed analysis, the percentage of housing expenditure showed a dramatic decrease over a 60-year period, stood at 72.1% in 1950 and fell extremely around a half at 22 percent in 2010 which was followed by education which decreased slightly at 6.6% to be at 6.3 percent. By contrast, the percentage of food spending increased significantly from 11.2 percent to more than a third in the same period.

Turning to the next data, the percentage of transportation expenditure showed a rise around one in ten percent, 3.3% in 1950 to 14 percent in 2010. Then, it was followed by health care which increased at a small amount. 19.2% of increase is presented by other sectors over that period.

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A comparison of the percentage OF SEVERAL household spending in a country ...
... inevitable that there were A significant change in the percentage ...
While the percentage of housing'S expenditure decreased significantly, food'S spending showed the opposite.

... the percentage of housing'S expenditure showed a dramatic decrease over a 60-year period, IT stood at 72.1% in 1950 and fell extremely BY around a half at TO 22 percent in 2010 which was followed by . FOLLOWING THIS, THE EXPENSE FOR education which decreased slightly at 6.6% to be at 6.3 percent. By contrast, the percentage of food'S spending increased significantly ...

... the percentage of transportation'S expenditure showed a rise around one in ten percent, FROM 3.3% in 1950 to 14 percent in 2010.

Hadi, this is thorough explanation of the information you were provided with. There were only insignificant grammatical changes to be made in order to make it smoother to read. You did a very good job in terms of explaining the chart contents. In your next practice test, make sure to try a more advance English word usage. While your vocabulary is acceptable a the moment, you need to try using more advanced devices in order to prove a heightened grasp of the English language.

...percentage OF household... illustrated in THE pie charts. At first glance, it is inevitable that there were significant changeS in the ...household spending at IN several...Moving ON to MORE detailed analysis,... 60-year period, AND stood at 72.1% in 1950 and fell extremely FALLING TO around a half at 22 percent... transportation expenditure EXPENSES showed a rise AN INCREASE OF around ... 19.2% of THE increase is presented by other sectors over that THE SAME period.

Hi Bunglon, let me give you some suggestion!! :)

..there were significant changeCHANGES in the percentage..
..expenditure decreased significantly, food spending showed the oppositeTHE REVERSE.

..over a 60-year period, WHICH stood at 72.1% in 1950 and fell...
By contrast, the percentage of food spendingFOOD CONSUMPTION increased...

May be you can alter "the percentage" with "the proportion"