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Different priority of expenditures in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan


mardian24 46 / 75  
Nov 28, 2016   #1
The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

A breakdown of the proportion of money spent by five different categories in United States, Canada, United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009 is depicted in the bar chart. Overall, it can be seen that housing was the highest percentage for all countries, while in health care recorded less priority.

To begin with, the percentage of expenditures had different values. In housing, United States experienced the most favourite expenditures at more than quarter, while in Canada gained lower percentage by about 5%. Furthermore, in food had big gap in the percentage of money spent. Japan witnessed a peak point at just under 25%, while in United States recorded by approximately 8%.

On the other hand, the greatest gap appeared in the proportion of money spent in transportation. Canada existed at one in fifth, while Japan revealed twofold lower than in Canada. Moreover, in health care saw the smallest percentage at just above 0% in United Kingdom, while in United States showed at just over one in twentith. After that Canada and Japan resulted the same percentage at just under 5%.


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faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Nov 29, 2016   #2
Overall, it can be seen that housing was the highest percentage ...
Mardian, I think you can emphasize your overview with add another general fact. For instance, if you see in clothing, the difference between each country is the smallest among all. You can add this to the overview. Or maybe you have other views in the bar chart.

To begin with, the percentage of expenditures had different values.

What is the meaning of that ? Maybe you can add some details like ; had "big" different value. I think all percentage had different value. Please make the writer dont' confuse with the sentence. If you translate it into indonesia: "untuk memulai, persentase dari pengeluaran memiliki nilai yang beda" ?????

Stick to the English please


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