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IELTS Task 1 : The different ways of collecting water to fulfill the irrigation


Clark Kent 20 / 23 6  
Oct 9, 2015   #1
The diagrams show the different way of collecting water to fulfill the irrigation. Overall, it can be seen that both of this techniques use a different equipment but same aim.

The first method is called swing basket. This way uses two persons and tools such as ropes and basket from bamboo or leather. This way is used if the deep of the canal just 1-2 meters. Firstly, the ropes fastened to the four sides of the basket. Secondly, two persons stand face to face while hold 2 robes each person. Then, they working together to fill the basket with water and move the water to the canal irrigation by ropes in their hands.

The second method is called rope and bucket. This technique uses more complicated equipment, such as basket, pulley, rollers, ropes, and animal as a mover. This method is used for collecting water in high area such in hill. Firstly, dig a wells until reach 50 meters depth. Secondly, install the rollers in the edge of the wells and also install the pulley to the top of the wells. Third, fasten the ropes to the basket and connect it to the pulley and rollers, then fasten the other side of the ropes to the animal, such a cow as a mover. So, basically the animal do all the process of collecting water by down the hill. When the cow go down the hill, the ropes which connect with the cow will raise the basket that connect with it also. After the basket reach the upper side of the well, it will spill the water automatically.



Pramudita 14 / 11 6  
Oct 9, 2015   #2
Overall, it can be seen that both of thisthese techniques use a different equipment but same aim.

The first method is called swing basket. This way uses two persons andsome tools such as ropes and basket from bamboo or leather. Also, it needs people involvement.

Secondly, two persons stand face to face while hold 2 robes each person . Then, they working together to fill the basket with water and move the water to the canal irrigation by ropes in their hands.to lift the basket which has been filled with water

and move it to the canal irrigation


The second method is called rope and bucket. This technique is more complicated than the first method, because this uses more complicatedmany equipment, such as basket, pulley, rollers, ropes, and animal as a mover.

...then fasten the other side of the ropes to the animal, such a cow as a mover .

Many repetition words on this essay, such as "use, fasten, connect,..."
I suggest to avoid this.


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