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( IELTS essay)Difficult hobbies are more enjoyable?


joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 1, 2013   #1
Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People are different and their perceptions of life are diverse. Some people think that difficult hobbies are more enjoyable than easy hobbies, but others oppose. In my opinion both easy and difficult hobbies are equally have fun and excitements.

Hobbies are activities chosen by people to fill their leisure time without expecting monitory benefits. Thus, the ultimate aim of hobbies is enjoyment and relaxation. People can select different hobbies according to their available free time, nature of daily work and interest. Some people find enjoyment in easy hobbies like reading. After a full day's hard work, it gives them physical relaxation. Besides reading books can help them to create their own world with different characters of the book and provide greater pleasure in imagination. Though it is an easy hobby, nobody can deny it by saying that it is not enjoyable as it is an easy hobby.

Apparently, difficult hobbies like bike stunting and baggy jumping give enjoyment to the people who follow it. These hobbies offer them an opportunity to show their bravery, and improve their mental power to face and confront dangers and difficulties. Furthermore, this gives a chance to burst out the tensions of spectators too. As it is a hard task, it needs constant hard work to achieve the goal. Nevertheless, dedication, constant long hard work and practice let them to be prefect in their hobbies. Additionally, these people may not always get the same level of enjoyment. The greater the performance, the higher the satisfaction will be.

To conclude, it not the name or difficulty of a hobby make it enjoyable, but the attitude and interest of the people towards it. After analyzing both sides, I feel that both easy and difficult hobbies are equally entertaining according to the perception of the people those who select it.

somysojan 8 / 19 8  
Feb 2, 2013   #2
the ultimate aims of a hobbiesyisshould be enjoyment and relaxation

People are different and their perceptions of life are diverse. Some people think that difficult hobbies are more enjoyable than easy hobbies, but others oppose. In my opinion both easy and difficult hobbies are equally have fun and excitements.

i think in question it is not mentioned about the opposite view, it asks about whether you agree or disagree to that particular argument. so the introduction can be written in this way as well

"People have different opinion on pursing hobbies according to their tastes. Some people are of the view that difficult hobbies are more interesting than easy one's. I strongly disagree to this notion,as the comlexity of a hobby has no relation with imparting enjoyment.The reasons are going to discuss below".

you can list out the reasons in body paragraphs proving your argument.
devabe2005 46 / 97  
Feb 3, 2013   #3
Besides reading books can help them to create their own world with different characters of the book and provide greater pleasure in imagination. Though it is an easy hobby, nobody can deny it by saying that it is not enjoyable as it is an easy hobby. --> i think you can give example "for example" or "to ilustrate" while giving proof --> For example, reading books can help them to create their own world with different characters of the book and provide greater pleasure in imagination. Though it is an easy hobby, nobody can deny it by saying that it is not enjoyable as it is an easy hobby.

To conclude, it not the name or difficulty --> i think you missed is in between it and not --> To conclude, it is not the name or difficulty
beyondmtk 9 / 16 4  
Feb 3, 2013   #4
but the attitude and interest of the people towards it.
==>I think it would be better if you wrote like this "but the interests and attitude of the people towards them. "

After analyzing both sides, I feel that both easy and difficult hobbies are equally entertaining according to the perception of the people those who select it .

==>How about using who select them .
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 3, 2013   #5
People are different and their perceptions of life are diverse.

People are diverse and their perceptions are even more diverse.

Thus,Therefore the ultimate aim of hobbies is enjoyment and relaxation.

... "thus" is not wrong... however, "therefore"is better :)

Thus, the ultimate aim of hobbies is to enjoyment and relaxation .

In my opinion both easy and difficult hobbies are equally have fun and excitements.

.... excellent .... well said :)
Your introduction is really good :)

People can select different hobbies according to their available free time, nature of daily work and interest.

After a full day's hard work, it gives them physicalmental relaxation.

... how books can give physical relaxation? I guess what you mean is mental relaxzation
OP joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 17, 2013   #6
Hai Dumi, Dev, Somy and Dongguo..
Hai dumi..

Reading books gives physical rest and thereby physcical rest..(
Am i wrong..?

Thanks for your correction..

Hai Somy and Dev..
Thanks for your concern..

Hai Dongguo..
Thanks..

Tessy


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