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Difficulties of living in a city. How to make urban life better?


Hashirama 1 / 1  
May 3, 2017   #1

enjoying a life in an urban place or on distant, rural areas?



MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE MIGRATING TO CITIES IN SEARCH OF A BETTER LIFE, BUT CITY LIFE CAN BE EXTREMELY DIFFICULT. EXPLAIN SOME OF THE DIFFICULTIES OF LIVING IN A CITY. HOW CAN GOVERNMENTS MAKE URBAN LIFE BETTER FOR EVERYONE?

Essay:

From the beginning of the industrialization to today's world, urbanization has appeared and always been an enormous issue for the human beings since it is totally demanding for governments to manage such populous cities. In my opinion, there are various difficulties of living in a large city and governments have certain solutions to make urban life better.

To begin with, it is apparent that cities are normally overcrowded, which may cause numerous serious problems such as high crime and poverty rates or making them more vulnerable to terrorist attacks. For instance, with the population at millions, Paris, New York City and Brussels were suffered bloody terrorist attacks, causing billions of dollars in property and infrastructure damage and thousands of deaths. The second difficulty could be that the environment, particularly the air quality in cities, is exceedingly poor. To illustrate, there was an experiment made by walking on streets in Beijing with a vacuum cleaner and using it to suck up the air for a few hours per day throughout a week. After 7 days, they got a 4 kilograms cube of metal. In addition, it is absurd to disregard the high cost of living for the urban inhabitants. Citizens have to pay expensive prices for housing, transportation and food. Consequently, the city life these days is obviously hard, unhealthy and even insecure.

To tackle those complicated issues, I believe governments have several measures to take. Firstly, removing industrial zones to rural areas would be the perfect solution. People tend to move to large metropolises on account of their attractiveness for job opportunities, hence this strategy could help to decrease the overcrowding, pollution and traffic congestion in cities and also balance the urban and rural areas in population and economy. Secondly, governments should invest more and more money for affordable and social housing, which could help to raise the standard of living, especially for the less well off. Furthermore, in order to counter crime and terrorist attacks, increasing security forces and controlling immigrants seem to be the sole ways. Frankly, these are just partial measures for this worry, a permanent solution is still out of reach.

In conclusion, it is undoubted that city life is not simply easy. Nevertheless, it is believed that governments have enough ability and power to solve those issues, notwithstanding the existing entanglements.

vinusi 1 / 1 1  
May 4, 2017   #2
I think you should make clear what is the thesis statement of your essay in the introduction, you can state what migration you mean (urbanization?), what is the difficulties of living in the city and the government policy. If you choose urbanization, you should consistent.

In the second paragraph, the terrorist attack is too far. You could explain what is the difficulties of living in the city, not the impact of migration to the city. For example, The first difficult for migrating people is difficult to find a job especially if they just have less experience ... Second, the living cost is high...(explain why) Third, reason 3...

In the third paragraph, you should explain the government policy that makes the urban life better for everyone. It is better if the policy solves the difficulties you mention. In addition, you should make it clear who is the "everyone".

In conclusion, please restate your opinion and highlight the reason.

I hope it can help you.


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