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Digital textbooks vs Textbook


KathyLala 20 / 116  
Sep 15, 2010   #1
I read an article that mentioned about future used of digital textbook in schools, hence I think about it for a good topic to write about. So, please check for my grammar

Prompt: Digital textbooks should be used in schools. Agree or disagree, explain?
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There is no doubt that schools are always adding new and providing learning materials to students. Using digital textbooks is one of the ways to improve our teaching and learning tools. It benefits students by saving time, enhancing students' computer skills, and offering a paperless system.

Time is so fleeting in this day and age. Starting on the first day of school, students are supposed to work immediately, and they are assigned homework and reading right away. Unfortunately, some of them are unable to complete the project on time because they do not have textbooks ready for them to check out. It is quick and convenient for students when they do not have to spend hours at a library or bookstore to check out books.

Nowadays, we are continually informed about new technology that is being developed to improve our quality of life. We can access to a library or other information with a touch of a button. Ordinary citizens can use their credit cards to purchase a limitless variety of products in countries throughout the world. Some online courses do not require students to attend class. The students just turn a computer on and look at the computer screen for lessons. The idea of having digital textbooks would give students the opportunity to learn new techniques to prepare students with certain computer skills when they are going to a higher grade.

Equally important, saving our environment and resources are our first priority. School children are always told to keep the earth green. Adults are told about global warming; particularly when tons of trees have been torn down to make paper products. Some companies such as banks and credit cards encourage their clients with instant discount when the customers sign up for a paperless system. Obviously, a nonprinting system such as digital textbooks would be a solution to make a green land.

To this end, these are the main factors of having digital textbooks in our schools. This new attempt takes a big step in the right direction of enhancing our teaching and learning tools. It maximizes students' time, improves their computer skills, and makes the world better.

ershad193 14 / 337 5  
Sep 16, 2010   #2
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There is no doubt that schools are always adding new (???) and providing learning materials to students

Starting from the first day of school, students are supposed to work immediately, and they are assigned homework and reading right away.

Unfortunately, some of them are unable to complete the project on time because they do not have textbooks ready for them to check out. It is quick and convenient for students when they do not have to spend hours at a library or bookstore to check out books.

I'm not sure if I understood correctly. Do you mean to say that books are not available immediately after classes start, and consequently, students need to spend most of their time in libraries?

Anyway, I'm correct, then it would be better if you expound on the idea. Otherwise, rephrase the sentences to improve clarity.

We can access to a library or other information with a touch of a button.
or
We can gain access to a library or other information with a touch of a button.

The idea of having digital textbooks would

The word idea doesn't sound right. I'd make a change to that sentence.
The idea of having Digital textbooks would give students the opportunity to learn new techniques to prepare students with certain computer skills when they are going to a higher grade.

It maximizes students' time, improves their computer skills, and makes the world better

You should change the wording of this sentence. It looks very similar to the last sentence of the first para.
OP KathyLala 20 / 116  
Sep 16, 2010   #3
Thank you Ershad!
" I'm not sure if I understood correctly. Do you mean to say that books are not available immediately after classes start, and consequently, students need to spend most of their time in libraries?"

yes, you're correct, that is what I meant.
I really don't know how to write the conclusion, but I will try
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Sep 18, 2010   #4
It benefits students by saving time, enhancing students' computer skills, and offering a paperless system.

This is very good grammar, and it is a very good thesis statement.

There is no doubt that schools are always adding new and providing learning materials to students. -----Yeah, like Ershad says, it looks like a word is missing. Maybe you mean this:

There is no doubt that schools are always adding new learning materials that students must access.

(above) I added the word "access" and used it as a verb. This is similar to this great sentence:
We can access to a library or other information with a touch of a button.
but I had to cross out "to"
You can also do this:
We can have access to a library or other information with a touch of a button.
(In the sentence above, access is a noun.)

Ordinary citizens can use their credit cards to purchase a limitless variety of products in countries throughout the world. --- good sentence!

Equally important, saving our environment and resources are is our first priority.
Saving ----> is....

To this end, these are the main factors of having digital textbooks in our schools.
"To this end" = "in order to achieve this" so it is not quite right here.

It might be better with an s here on the end of "readings."
...are assigned homework and readings right away.

:-)
OP KathyLala 20 / 116  
Sep 18, 2010   #5
Thanks Kevin. I have made some changes

Unfortunately, some of them are unable to complete the project on time because their textbooks are not available immediately after classes start. It is unconvenient and waste of time when students have to spend hours at a library or bookstore to check out books.

for the last para I just have a question, do I have to give a "signal" of ending essay such as using "In short, in conclusion, in the final analysis..." at the begining of the last para?

These are the main factors of having digital textbooks in our schools. This new attempt takes a big step in the right direction of enhancing our teaching and learning tools. With all benefits it provides to students, I believe this crucial techonology is a need in very school.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Sep 20, 2010   #6
do I have to give a "signal" of ending essay such as using "In short, in conclusion, in the final analysis..." at the beginning of the last para?

No way! I hate that stuff. It is useful, though, to start that last para with a sentence that has some key words from the essay.

Just say what needs to be said. It needs no flowery dressing.

unconvenient
inconvenient

techonology is a need in very school.---- this is all messed up.
technology is a need in every school
OP KathyLala 20 / 116  
Sep 21, 2010   #7
techonology is a need in very school.---- this is all messed up.
I am using "technology" to sub for digital textbooks because this term has many repeatings in the essay.
alswn95 11 / 28  
Sep 21, 2010   #8
There is no doubt that schools are always adding new and providing learning materials to students.
Awkward sentence.

New and providing?? I'm not sure if they fit well together.

How about...

There is no doubt that schools are always providing new learning materials to students.

Digital textbooks is one of the ways to improve our teaching and learning tools because it benefit students by saving time, enhancing their computer skills, and offering a paperless system.
pendar 6 / 12  
Sep 22, 2010   #9
disadvantage of digital textbooks is not mentioned in your essay.You should consider both advantage and disadvantage.
shofa_nefertete 12 / 35  
Sep 22, 2010   #10
The suggested revision is really giving the essay a better presentation
OP KathyLala 20 / 116  
Sep 22, 2010   #11
Thanks for all the suggestions, wait until I pass the test, then I take you guys to chill out!!!!!!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Sep 24, 2010   #12
I am using "technology" to sub for digital textbooks because this term has many repeatings in the essay.

Yes, I understand that. I wrote "all messed up" because I did not understand it when you had written "very" --- I was confused! :-)


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