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The disadvantages of small towns; Social life, educational opportuinities


hope_HD 1 / -  
Mar 5, 2013   #1
Although life in small towns is very peaceful and quiet ,it also has many disadvantages . The first problem is education -this is the most disadvantage of small towns . In small towns , you don't have opportunity to take various courses such as day schools ,night courses ,language centers ,soft skill classes and exhibitions to improve your mind . Next , there is also lack of entertainment services . You're difficult to find a theater , swimming pool tennis course and so forth. In addition rural people

aren't provided with modern conveniences such as electricity ,running water ,computer ,internet and all sort of labor saving devices. And last but not least ,the transport system in small towns is circumscribe . Roads aren't asphalted ,it is often difficult to go in the rainny season . And means such as bus ,taxi,etc isn't also here. Life in here more disadvantages and boring ,I think it won't be suitable with active people .

I hope you will see and give me some advices for my paragraph because my skill is still quite bad !!! ^ ^

toantva509 4 / 9  
Mar 5, 2013   #2
Sorry, but what is your essay for. If it is written for IELTS, for example, you should pay attention its required structure.
dumi 1 / 6,929 1592  
Mar 5, 2013   #3
Well... this looks like a writing for IELTS or TOEFL speaking task. If it is so, then it's ok. However, if this is for a writing task, then you need to pay attention to your structure. You need to have at least 4 paras that include introduction, 2 body paras and the conclusion.

The first problem is education -this is the most disadvantage of small towns .

The first problem is that you have very limited opportunities with regard to education.

In small towns , you don't have opportunity to takeSmall towns do not have enough resources to offer various courses such as day schools,night courses ,language centers ,soft skill classes and exhibitions to improve your mind .

This is what I suggest;
Small towns struggle with their limited resources and capacities to offer better educational opportunities such as skilled and experienced teachers, advance infrastructure, enhanced curriculum..


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