Discuss the cause of air pollution, conclude the benefits of car-free days, give three solutions

Task 2:
Some people think that international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, however, others think there are other ways.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

summary:
Body 1: Quick discuss the cause of air pollution->conclude the benefits of car-free days->benefit in some aspects
Body 2: Give 3 solutions: using alternative energy,monitoring plastic waste,using public transports

Many people think that international car-free days can curb the level of air pollution effectively. Meanwhile, others insist that there will be other proper ways. In my opinion, I side with the latter view.

On the one hand, creating international car-free days can benefit the environment in some aspects. Today, one of the causes of air pollution is the emissions from transportation, namely CO2 and NO2. The working mechanism of a vehicle is burning fossil fuels such as coal,gas and oil to create energy to move, which also emits a huge amount of air pollutants and smog into the atmosphere. Therefore, having a day to not use any transportation can limit such a huge amount of exhaust fumes. However, it can only be beneficial for a short time. In other words, daily emissions can be about hundreds of times the reduction in these international car-free days, so it is not very effective as expected.

On the other hand, I believe that there must be a lot of other ways to reduce air pollution. It is necessary for the authorities to encourage citizens to shift towards using alternative energy rather than relying on fossil fuels. Because fossil combustion is the main reason for the deterioration of air quality. In addition to this, the disposal of waste, especially plastic waste which emits toxic fumes when incinerating, should be regulated and monitored. The final solution can be the most effective way of reducing air pollution is to encourage people to use public transports in parallel with increasing the taxes on car ownership. Therefore, there are a lot of other ways to limit the level of air pollution besides international car-free days.

In conclusion, in spite of the benefits that international car-free days brings to our environment, I still believe that there will be other ways to tackle this problem.

Thank you for outlining how you decided to approach the writing of the essay. I have to point out though that the method by which you decided to discuss the presentation does not meet the formatting requirements of the essay response. I am not sure if you are being tutored by someone else, in which case you should truly be having that person check your essay and not me because my teaching style is different, but my students use a different approach, one that is more centered towards correct scoring considerations.

The main error the presentation is that you have taken a non-prompt responsive approach to the discussion. It appears that you have decided to create your own discussion focus, which will result in an automatic failing score. None of your discussion outline responds to the comparison discussion based on public reasoning and private opinion presentation requirements. The essay cannot be given a passing score when it does not discuss both views with an opinion comparison. The essay failed because it did not follow discussion requirements.