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discuss the changes in society which have an efect on teenagers?


lynaz 1 / 1  
Aug 23, 2010   #1
hi..please check if my introduction is good.and do tellme what is wrong and what should have been added instead!

changes in the society are inevitable.A society cannot remain static.changes are intrinsic for the ultimate progress of the society.being part of this fast movin and sophisticated world,the teenagers are mostly targeted due to drastic changes.these fundamental changes in society which have agreat impetus on the reenagers may either be beneficial or malevolent also.these influential changes have help a handful teenagers to achieve a bright future while others are still ensnared in the vicious cycle of failure.

EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Aug 24, 2010   #2
changes in the society are inevitable.A society cannot remain static...How about like this;

A society cannot remain static, as change is inevitable.

C hanges are intrinsic for the ultimate progress of the society.

being part of this fast moving and sophisticated world, the teenagers are mostly affected due to drastic changes.

Don't forget that you're supposed to 'discuss the changes which have an effect..."
OP lynaz 1 / 1  
Aug 25, 2010   #3
thank you for z correction. . . . .

but please tell me what ideas should i add to improve my introduction.

thanks again in advance.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 27, 2010   #4
fundamental changes in society which have agreat impetus on the reenagers may either be beneficial or malevolent also.

This is the only statement you make about how changes affect teenagers, and it is not very clear.

Say something about CHANGE and about BEING A TEENAGER:

Fundamental changes in society can be traumatic for teenagers because, just as teenagers are learning how the world works, it changes. This can be a cause of anxiety.


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