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QuynhTrang 1 / 1  
Apr 27, 2012   #1
Hi, I'm Quynh Trang and I'm a newbie to this site. This is my first post here so I really want to hear your opinions about it. Thanks in advance. I hope you will enjoy it :)

Some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

As the globalization is developing fast and dragging serious cultural issues along, there is no doubt that the effect of tourism over culture has been a matter of debate. Many people claim that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. This viewpoint, however, is refuted by many who think that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue. These two points of view should be analyzed with thoughts in this order.

It is undeniable that tourism brings a lot of positive impact on culture. When tourists visit a place, they will study about the history, discover specialties and especially enjoy sightseeing. Once they get home, they will share their experience and feeling about it, which also helps to promote that culture and attract more potential visitors. It can be argued that the best way to prevent culture from fading away is to spread it worldwide. Therefore, culture can be protected and passed on to the younger generations. Moreover from the host side, tourism can help create more investment opportunities, offer more jobs, improve facilities and better living standard of locals. Money earned from tourism can be used in activities to preserve culture such as repairing historical places, advertising and raising awareness of protecting culture, etc. Thus, it is understandable why many gravitate towards this point of view.

However, there is also a strong argument that tourism is destroying culture for profit. Taking underdeveloped and developing countries as an exam, it is a fact that environmental problems are getting worse in famous destinations. When locals realize that they can get a lot of profit from tourism, some of them will be capable of doing everything to get as much money as they could from the tourists, even when the price for that is damaging the environment and the background. In addition, some locals may have to repeat doing something everyday which is supposed to be done only on special days like a performance of unique musical instruments, and then it will make these activities lost it meanings. It may also bring other negative impacts such as the local economy might be unstable, costs of living for the locals is increasing... Hence, it is reasonable why many express approval for this point of view.

By way of conclusion, it is probably difficult to decide whether tourism brings more positive or negative impacts over culture issue. From what has been discussed above, I think that with the effort of government, the benefits of tourism can outweigh all those negative impacts.

Quynh Trang
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Apr 27, 2012   #2
This conclusion is similar to what you said about previous paragraph. You can say:"As a result, the negative effects of tourism on environment, and economy of a local individuals can be viewed as the reasons why a group of people have negative attitude toward the development of tourist industry

Any way, this paragraph would be better to rewrite because it does not encompass what the topic has asked
By way of conclusion, it is probably difficult to decide whether tourism brings more positive or negative impacts (use synonym: influences, effects)overon culture issue. From what has been discussed above, I think that with the effort of government, the benefits of tourism can outweigh all those negative impacts(use synonym) .

Regards
A.Zafari
OP QuynhTrang 1 / 1  
Apr 27, 2012   #3
Thank you so much for your opinions Zafari. I will consider your suggestions. However I do not quite agree with you at some points.
1. As the globalization is developing fast and dragging serious cultural issues along, there is no doubt that the effect of tourism over culture has beenis bein g a matter of debate. Many people claim that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. This viewpoint, however, is refutse d by manyothers who think that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue(don not copy the title)

I think present perfect is more suitable in that sentence and that verb is refuted, not refused and refute means to prove something that is wrong.

2. . Taking underdeveloped and developing countries as an exam???, it is a fact that environmental problems are getting worse in famous destinations
I am sorry for my careless mistake. Exam here means example
3. some of them will be capable of doingto do everything tofor getting as much money as they couldcan from the tourists, even when the price for that is damaging the environment and the background

I think capable always uses with of

Again, thank your for your suggestions
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Apr 27, 2012   #4
Hi, first of all what I said was just suggestion. 1) if u want to use present perfect you should change the tens of previous sentence too. The first one is present continuous and the second one is present perfect. This is because of the word "as" at the beginning. When you use "as" it means that two thing is happening as the same time and parallel.

3) I agree with you about this. Sorry for my mistake.
Regards
A. Zafari
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Apr 29, 2012   #5
Hi, I am not strict on my idea,, I am not expert on this field. So, if I made a mistake I really sorry about that. Any way, I would be appreciated if you also read my essays and give your opinion about. Best regards. A. Zafari


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