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The distribution of population in three areas of the Northwest region - IELTS 1


NourNour 22 / 39 7  
May 7, 2016   #1
The bar chart gives information about the percentage of distribution of population in three areas of the Northwest region (urban, suburban and rural) in 1900, 1950, 2000 and an estimated percentage in 2050.

Overall, there was a significant increase in the proportion of people who live the suburbs over 1900 and 2000. In contrast, the percentage of people who lived in the rural areas considerably decreased, while the percentage of urban population was more or less stable. The highest percentage of population was in the rural area in 1900, however, it is predicted that this percentage will be the lowest in 2050. Eventually, this percentage will be strikingly similar to the percentage of population in the suburban regions in 1900.

Although people in the past tended to live in the countryside, their tendency significantly changed through time to settle in the suburban area of the Northwest region. In 1900, the percentage of population was 65% in the rural area. Then, it went down to 20% in 2000, while, in the suburbs, the population was 10%. Then, it steadily went up until it reached 40% which is the same percentage of population in urban area in the same year. The urban area witnessed a minimal growth of about 10% compared by percentage of 1900 and 1950.

By 2050, it is expected that the population will reach approximately 55% in the suburban area, while it is forecast to fall down to 10% in the rural area. Concerning the urban area, the population will be similar to the one of 1900 and 1950, which was about 35%.




madmoiselle 21 / 33 5  
May 8, 2016   #2
... the proportion of people who liveD IN the suburbs AREA over IN 1900 and 2000.

... the rural area in 1900, (.) However, it is predicted that this percentage ...

through THE time to settle ING in the suburban area of the Northwest region .

10% IN compared by TO THE percentage of 1900 and 1950 THE PRIOR YEAR.

while it is forecastED to WILL fall down to 10%

the population will be similar to the one YEAR of 1900 and 1950
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
May 9, 2016   #3
Hi Nour, I would like to add that your analysis is written fairly well, you have one of the most elaborated analysis for this particular bar graph.

The good thing about this analysis, as mentioned, is how you were able to elaborate the graph through the use of conversational words that are absolutely enlightening to the readers.

Should you be able to polish the analysis, try to merge the last two paragraphs of the essay and keep a summarized bold one, in order to create a well presented essay. The more paragraphs you incorporate in your essay, the harder it is for the readers to grasp the information so it would be best to keep a maximum of 3 paragraphs especially in this type of writing exercise.

I hope this insights helped.


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