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?Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference?
Students have two options to choose where to live in university dormitories or in apartments. Besides both have advantages, preferences change from one student to another.
Many students prefer to live on campus instead of living out. Obviously it saves students time. Living on campus they do not need to spend their time on school way. Besides dormitories offer students make friends, also from other countries, students cannot find time to be alone. Whenever they feel themselves alone I am sure that there is a person to speak. For example when I started the university, I had some worry about adaptation to my new environment because I would share my room someone who I had never spoken but after I met her and other girls in the dormitory, anymore university life was not difficult to me. When I had a problem I asked for advice to my roommates or other students in dormitory.
On the other hand, to live in apartment gain people lots of new experience, which means the first step into real life. In contrary to live in dormitory, students do not have to stand other people or act together. Contrary to dormitories you do not have to eat same time and same canteen and so on. Living in apartments you can manage your time according to your desire. Furthermore, many things are in your responsibility like cooking, shopping, and paying the bills as well as all these things make you ready to real life. Furthermore dormitories rooms are generally tiny, besides, you have to share the room with another student and it is likely to lead to loose concentrate when you are studying.
Although both university housing and apartment have advantages, I prefer to live in an apartment where I feel myself more comfortable. Because I can pay attention to my lessons in my own room and prepare myself into the world.
