eco-friendly farm with a therapy
Farm, ranch, grange, you name it, and most people would dream of having it. However, there are three essentials for my dream farm. The first essential is that my farm must be eco-friendly. For example, I will use organic fertilizers and natural preventions instead of chemical fertilizers and pesticides. Then there will be harmless to the environment and kind to all lives. Also, my dream farm must be self-sufficient. I can make a living on my own from the daily farm products. For instance, I can make breads by growing wheats and have fresh milk by raising cows. Finally, my dream farm must have therapeutic effect. When I am upset, I can walk around the farm and indulge myself in the easy atmosphere that makes me comfortable. In conclusion, my dream farm must be eco-friendly, self-sufficient, and therapeutic. Hopefully, I can happily stay there forever.
[Contributor] - / 7,660 1998
The first few sentences of your presentation are a bit confusing. Not everyone would dream of living on a farm and yet your sentence makes it appear like everyone wants to live on a farm. Maybe you should rephrase that to instead say "people who wish to live on farms would dream of having these things on their own farm." The third sentence is incorrect as it should indicate "these" rathe than "there". I don't believe that these errors are so serious that it would change the meaning of your paragraph. However, clarity is important when you are practicing to write in English because using the wrong vocabulary can change the word meaning. Make sure to brush up on your vocabulary skills. That is your bigger problem at the moment. Your ability to write in an almost clear beginner English manner is good to read in this paragraph. It assures me that you are on the right track towards writing at a native speaker level in the future.