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Driver's license - should or should not?


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Apr 2, 2017   #1

Only smart drivers required



MY ESSAY: In modern days, whether teenagers possessing a "C" grade average school's diploma to become a drivers is becoming a thorny issue. Some think that this authenticate their potential and engagement, others express that it's such a redundancy because they find no interrelation between grade and license. In reality, we must acknowledge that a "C" grade proves teenagers' qualifications while we also realize that their presence do not help much with receiving a driver's license.

From an academic perspective, grade "C" indicates that teeanagers were at least sufficiently educated and thus having the ability to take responsibility for their stuffs. At school, juveniles are taught how to comply with the duties. Driving can also be considered as one of those assignments and causing trouble when driving can be granted as mistake. A responsible driver must be high-principled and always willing to take in anyone's criticism in order to reform him or herself explicitly. It's no doubt these morale can only be gained from a skill-cultivating process in educated environment. Personally, another reason why a "C" grade average should be required so as to possess a driver's license is because it will guarantee traffic participants' life. Every years thousands of teenagers peril by virtue of road accidents. It can be largely put down to their overventuresome driving. Undoubtedly, the casualities could remarkably increase unless a "C" grade was required. Students who aren't concerned with getting good grades may be indifferent to learning traffic rules and signs, thus tend to cause troublesome road accidents.

But if teenagers' ability to maintain a driver's license crave for a "C" grade average, will human's traveling demand be actually satisfied? Although grades may reflect teenagers' educated qualifications and responsibility, it clearly cannot judge their agility, vision and all traits associated with driving. In other words, grades have no correlation with driving skills. From a practical perspective, driving nowadays is necessary for many students to get to and from school and work. Calling upon driver's license would unfairly discriminate among poor students because academic and driving knowledge bear no resemblance to each other. In school, students were taught to grasp and analysis equations in Algebra, natural reactions in Chemistry, geographic locations of every religions in Geography while in driving, students were instructed to deal with steering wheel, gear shift, brakes... Apparently, student who is not excel at grades can absolutely become good driver if he or she takes enough notice of what teachers present at their driving class. Beside, school and work can be viewed as embedding experience in students' life. It makes students themselves more complete, mature and potential. Thus denying students' good driving skills when they have a "C" grade average is indisputably an indirect way to split up students' chance of discovering themselves. Yet it is abstruse that government try to invest time, money, effort and habour to educate students with the purpose of making them good enough to maintain a "C" grade average while their goal is just to become proficient in driving. Schools' goal of educating is to make sure students have steady jobs then thrive in the long run. To my way of thinking, I firmly believe that grade is absolutely not the only way leading to success and also, we should not judge students' talent through their grades. I have witnessed this in my own life through seeing some success stories such as Bill Gates, Mark Zukerberg, Thomas Edison..., even some prosperous businessmen raising their career from taxi drivers. Students may do exactly the same if they are courageous, ambitious and tenacious enough.

So perhaps the answer to the driver's license offering lies in between: it is time for government to weigh out pros and cons of taking a "C" grade average into account as one of the vital criterias. It is true that grades tell a lot about one's proficiency, and skipping it to grant students chance of uncovering themselves is not a bad thing.

However, we should not take the school's grade average for granted. School's diploma may not repercuss our driving handiness, but it should not be eliminated after all. Drivers should have the faintest idea about academic stuffs such as road rules and basic theories on driving. It's imperative that we hold on to the most subtle and flexible solutions to keep everything in balance because relativity is one of the most awe-inspiring figure human is acquainted with.

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Apr 3, 2017   #2
Tran, I think it will be best if I show you the scores you might get, per individual consideration for your writing so that you can effectively develop the problem points in order to ensure a higher score in the actual test. By giving you individual scores, you will be able to focus on developing your weak points in the upcoming practice tests. Let's start with your mastery level.

Your mastery level should be around a 4. This score is based upon the way that you were able to present an argumentative essay using proper points, discussion considerations, and examples. For the ideas and analysis portion, you could score anywhere between a 4 and 5. The possible score is based upon paragraph 3 of your essay which truly discusses the reasons and considerations given for the C grade before being given a driver's license. I would like to advise you to divide paragraphs such as that into 2 though. The length of the paragraph showed that you discussed 2 points of view already. It is always best to separate the thought discussions so that the reader will be able to properly analyze the content you have written.

Development and Support would be a 4. Your score in this section was the result of your clear explanation and use of examples in your essay to support your argument. Due to the number of reasons and supporting facts though, the essay tends to run too long and become too complicated. Try to keep the essay simple by providing only one strong argument in support of your reason. Multiple reasons tend to blur the discussion process.

Your organization skills can garner you a score of 5 because you were able to create a chronological discussion for your essay. You had a focused discussion throughout your essay. However, your transitioning from one paragraph or discussion to another needs more work. Finally, for language use, you get a 4. Try to improve on your sentence structure and grammar use. Be more precise with the complex words that you opt to use. There are some words such as "overturesome" that do not make sense because you made up the word. Make sure you only use words that exist in the dictionary and are also easily understandable by the reader. Do not use profession specific words or words that only you know the meaning to because you made it up on the fly. While you are not scored for mistakes, you are scored on the accuracy of word usage.
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Apr 3, 2017   #3
Thanks for your comments.
How is my score is 4 out of? The ACT essay is ranged by 12
Ok that's my mistake. I intend to write "overventuresome"


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