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IELTS TASK2:Should driving be taught at school?


gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Jul 1, 2013   #1
Young drivers are careless and overconfident, and too many are killed in accidents. To eliminate this problem, we could teach children the skills of safe driving while they are at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Throughout the years, the frequency of road accidents has been witnessed as an increasing trend in mankind. It is true that in most cases juvenile drivers are behind these tragic events. However, I do not agree that it is necessary to include driving lessons at school to solve this issue.

Firstly, the risk and choice to learn driving should be a personal option, not a compulsory requirement for everyone. Including driving in the school curriculum would force everyone to do it. This is unfair especially to those who think driving is not yet necessary for them to learn. Persons who opt to learn driving should avail the services of establishments like driving schools and private instructors.

Secondly, if schools were to include driving in their lessons, ironically they are encouraging children to drive at a young and immature age. Law prohibits driving under the age of 18 because these young individuals are considered to be prone in making wrong decisions under critical situations. In the secondary school I went before, faculty took road accidents seriously. They are against on parents consenting their children to drive. Thus, if students were caught doing such acts, they will be suspended for a few days.

Lastly, values like discipline are essential to become a responsible driver. He should control himself to avoid harmful things like drugs and alcohol. Unlike family, schools are limited to theoretically provide ideas and examples only in teaching moral values. Parents are the best teachers for their children in this area since they can be role models and they can show them real life situations.

Overall the aspects of individual preference, maturity, and teaching of moral values lead us to the theory that it is not recommended to have driving lessons taught at school in order to address problems in road accidents.

orxan88 5 / 8 2  
Jul 2, 2013   #2
your essay is very good and all structures have been well provided...
piggiepolly 2 / 2 2  
Jul 2, 2013   #3
well done, i think you should avoid using firstly. secondly & lastly because it's like listing, that's what my teacher said ^_^
fred123 6 / 8 2  
Jul 2, 2013   #4
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bein 3 / 10 3  
Jul 2, 2013   #5
if schools were to include

if schools include

and what type of conditional sentences did you use? 1 or 2?
OP gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Jul 2, 2013   #6
It is true that in most cases of juvenile drivers

Including Such driving in the school curriculum would not force anyone to do it.

I am quite confused. This will give an entirely different meaning on my sentences..please enlighten me further.

Neverthless, thanks for the feedback.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 4, 2013   #7
Throughout the years, the frequency of road accidents has been witnessed as an increasing trend in mankind .

...don't crowd your sentences with words unnecessarily. Keep it simple and clear!
quote=gmad06] However, I do not agree that it is necessary to include driving lessons atin school curriculum to solve this issue.[/quote

Including drivinglessons in the school curriculum would force everyone to do it.

This is unfair especially tofor those who think driving is not yet necessary for them to learn

This is unfair by those who are not yet prepared to, or have any interest in, learning driving.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jul 4, 2013   #8
Lastly, values like discipline are essential to become a responsible driver.

Lastly, to be a good driver, one needs to be responsible, disciplines and rich in his or her value system.

He should control himself to avoid harmful things like drugs and alcohol.

A driver should not consume drugs or alcohol while driving a car.

Unlike family, schools are limited to theoretically provide ideas and examples only in teaching moral values.

Unlike the family, the school has limitations in providing insights for students to develop good moral values.
rozha 15 / 34  
Jul 4, 2013   #9
it is a good writing, but i think learning rules and driving skills at school is a good way to decrease the car accidents , but teaching children how to drive a car is dangerous....i took benefit from your writing...thanx.;)
OP gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Jul 8, 2013   #10
hi pahan and dumi...thanks for the feedback..

it is a good writing, but i think learning rules and driving skills at school is a good way to decrease the car accidents , but teaching children how to drive a car is dangerous....i took benefit from your writing...thanx.;)

it is my pleasure..yes I think that would be a great insight for this prompt also..all the best.


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