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May 25, 2021   #1
Hi everyone, I am going to take the IELTS test next two months. I am glad to receive your feedback about my essay, thank you!

percentage of PEOPLE WHO passed THEIR driving test

A driving license is one of the most important identifications that one individual should have. The chart gives some information visually about the percentage of driving tests passed between men and women from 1980 to 2010.

Through 30 years, the ratio of women who passed their driving test has always been higher than this of men. It can be seen from the chart that almost half of women had driving licenses during the 1980s. Since then, this proportion has still increased and peaked at 68% in 2000. However, in the following ten years, it jumped down, to a lesser extent, 64%.

In regard to other gender, there was about a quarter of men passing their driving tests in 1980. This percentage grew rapidly during the 1990s and got nearly double in 2000. It seems like there was no change in the following ten years since then.

Overall, there are more women than men having driving licenses for 30 years. Nonetheless, this proportion of women tends to decrease while there are more and more men passing their driving tests.

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May 26, 2021   #2
[quote=phuongtrang56780]A driving license is ... individual should have.[/quote]
Task 1 essays do not require any personal opinion nor additional information Statements such as these are not necessary as it is not part of the scoring consideration. The summary overview should only be based on the provided image data.

The chart

There are several types of charts used in the test. The identifying name or title of the chart must be provided for differentiation and lor identification as a part of the TA requirement.

had driving licenses

Had driving licenses, or passed the test? There is a marked difference in the meaning of the 2. You representation says women have licenses, without referring to the test,which is the basis of information. That is an incorrect reference that is TA and C+C deductible. When properly structured this sentence becomes a repeat of the first sentence, another C+ C problem.

Overall, there are more ... their driving tests.

While the tending sentence maybe placed anywhere in the presentation, this sentence provides the most use and scoring impact when combined with the summary overview. That is because it completes the information summary at the very start, making it easier to understand the point of the report.

It seems

Use accurate statements. This is a note of uncertaintity that indicates a failure off analysis on your part. Again, the TA score shall be affected.
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May 26, 2021   #3
task 1 does not require ''A driving license is one of the most important identifications ...'', instead you should paraphrase the introduction