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Eaqual number of male & female students in universities


dido272000 7 / 18 1  
Jun 23, 2013   #1
Nowadays the tendency to attend university careers is progressively raising among both males and females. In parallel, gender issue has increasingly become a topic of discussion in terms of university career admission. In my opinion, volunteers should enroll academic careers due to their interest and qualification regardless of their gender with the following reasons.

Firstly, it is clear that males and females are physically and psychologically different. Female gender is more likely to be sensitive and theoretical compared with male gender. Moreover, girls are known to be physically weaker than boys. Therefore, since women and men are qualified for particular careers depend on their abilities, applying a specific proportion between two genders, whether it is in favor of girls or boys, is not a proper policy (or mechanism).

Secondly, every person has a specific talent in a particular field. Therefore, universities should accept students due to their qualification, not depending on a pre-determined (fixed) proportion forcibly. Thus, some specific academic careers may be attracted more by men and reversely some more by women.

Overall, each gender has some specific abilities and talents and more specifically every person has his/her own capabilities. Thus, it is not fair to consider a limited capacity for each gender in order to push them through enrolling academic courses. Students should be free to choose their field of interest and universities should be free to admit those who are more qualified for each career.

shinichi75 5 / 14 4  
Jun 23, 2013   #2
Hi,
I think you should use more practical examples to support your ideas.
Eddie Han 2 / 6  
Jun 23, 2013   #3
I agree with shinichi75. Though I don't think I can give you a perfect suggestion, this is what I think:

First of all, you need at least three reasons. I am not sure why, but many people seem to be more convinced
when there are at least three reasons to back up an idea. I see that it would be hard to come up with a third point,

but it would greatly improve your work. If there is no word limit to this, then go ahead and add another point in.

Secondly, you need a more solid evidence. Maybe a research result showing the difference between boys and girls,
Or a research showing the "success" percentage of the different genders will help to provide a solid ground to back your points up.

Lastly, I have a little trouble understanding your first point. You have said that two different genders are different
both physically and academically, but your connection between the difference and the reason to not to discriminate
between the two was not very clear. Maybe you should elaborate on that point further.

But, I do like your work as a whole. It is simple and easy to understand. To answer your question, yes, I agree
that there should be no gender discrimination in universities - or in any place for that matter.
temptprovidence 8 / 163 35  
Jun 23, 2013   #4
i agree with the above comments and also was feeling that your essay was just adequate but you need rather more. you can revise your own essay and then the comments then again your essay. you will come to the conclusion and you can then yourself attempt better... for you have the tendency for that.

and then with this...


Secondly, you need a more solid evidence. Maybe a research result showing the difference between boys and girls,
Or a research showing the "success" percentage of the different genders will help to provide a solid ground to back your points up.

here eddie said was somehow true but that would make your points dull for the reader but if you think your requirement is not the attraction of the reader but keep the prooving of your point as a priority, then do follow this.

BEST OF LUCK!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jun 23, 2013   #5
Hi,
I think you should use more practical examples to support your ideas.

....yes... shinichi75 has a very valid point. It appears that you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL and these tasks expect specific reasons and examples. Have only one reason per body para to support your opinion. Also give one specific example for each of your reason. That wii help you convince your examiner.


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