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An Easy Brand New Approach for Gardeners


Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Nov 14, 2016   #1
This summary is extracted from an article published on readitenglish.com/read/rcXgoi# . Its original title is Grow it yourself : Aquaponics

A brand new method in farming field is appeared to be true, Aquaponics. It is one way to farm plants by combining aquaculture and hydroponics system. Hence, the waste water from fish farming is utilized to grow organic foods owing to the fact that the required chemical fertilizer is found on the fish waste. It is needless to say that by using this kind of approach, everyone who settle in a poor soil can do farming as well since the plants only need one out of ten amount of water of what ordinary plants need. This methodology is overwhelmingly natural as no pesticide is involved. Then the other merits goes to the reduction of climate change, groundwater pollution and overfishing.

Aquaponics is completely easy to be done due to gardeners only need to feed their plants once a day without need to think about watering time. For all people who are interested in applying it can go to visit the inventor's, Ms. Bernstein's, video on her Youtube channel, or read her published book.
ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Nov 15, 2016   #2
Hi Mujaddidah,
Here's my analysis towards your article summary. Hope this helps :)

- A brand new method in farming fieldagriculture , Aquaponics, is appeared to be true, Aquaponics.
- It is one of the ways to farmcultivate plants/crops by combining...
- It isNeedless to say,that by using this kind of approach...
- This methodology is overwhelmingly(inappropriate collocation)completely natural as...
- Then, (comma needed) the other merits goesgo to the reduction of climate change, groundwater pollution and over-fishing.
- Aquaponics is completely (inappropriate collocation) extremely, really, very | enough, fairly, quite, rather, relatively | incredibly, ridiculously, surprisingly easy to be done... (those are the list of adverbs that can be collocated with the word "easy")

As you can see, some collocation problems are mentioned clearly. You need to pay attention to them in order to make your writing skill better.
alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Nov 15, 2016   #3
Hello, I give you my correction. thanks

... farming field is appeared will be true, Aquaponics. It is one of many way to farm plants by ...
Meanwhile , the waste water from ...

Then, the other merits goes ...

Aquaponics are completely easy to ...


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