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You are what you eat! Obesity is not problem anymore


Giansy11 18 / 32 5  
Sep 21, 2016   #1
Every women in this world already getting engaged, getting married
How about me? Getting fat! Yup, I'm only getting fat!!!

Obesity is the most terrible condition of human body, according to women argument.
Calories in food are a measure of energy for supporting human activities, but if you consume more, you should face your fate to close the obesity. This situation mostly happen in adults, where more than one billion of immature are overweight, The World Health Organization called obesity a global epidemic.

Dr. George Bray at the Pennington Biomedical Research Center in Louisianaled the new study, based on his experience, the biggest problem caused by bad food. He said controlling your food supplying, doesn't mean you should eat less than regularly, just add more fruits, vegetables, whole grains, fish, vegetable oils and nuts. Just consume these food continually and your weigh will decrease.

Overall, stop hurting yourself by avoided proteins, fats, or event do not eat all day long, our body need energy from calories. So, stop believe the ancient believe and eat the food properly.
mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 22, 2016   #2
hi giansy,let me see your summary

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... you should face your fate to close the obesityobese your body . This situation mostly happen in adultsmatures , where more than (...) called obesity is a global epidemic.

... based on his experience,said that the biggest problem ...
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We Shouldjust consume these food continuallyregularly and your weighweight will decrease.

#i think your conclusion is not rellevant with your explanation.
FirmanRomadhon20 9 / 15  
Sep 22, 2016   #3
Hello Giansy11, this is so informative writing, I just have some notes for you :

Every womenevery woman or some women ("every" is always followed by singular) in this world is or are (depend on your subject, this sentence needs verb) already getting engaged,and (it will be better to use "and") getting married

How about me? Getting fat! Yup, I'm only getting fat!!!

... based on his experience, explained that (it will create better sentence the biggest problem of obesity was caused by bad food.

I hope It will help


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