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Eating at home has many advantages; it's safer for us because we know what we are going to cook


SlimeTim 1 / 2 2  
Jun 29, 2016   #1
Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

According to me, I would like to prefer eating at home. I think that eating in home is safer for us because we know what we are going to cook. The ingredients we will buy are fresh or not? Nowadays, restaurants may buy the rotten things like dead fish and the made sauce from rubbish. That is why we need to be careful about the food we eat and only eat in a restaurant that we're sure they are safe, it is hard to tell that if the restaurant is using fresh or rotten ingredients. Therefore, I think it is better to stay at home and make your food. That will be cheaper and healthy, and it also improves your cooking skill so you can see how useful it is if you cook at home. You can still eat outside but only for special occasions, you should eat at home for your good. You can also be bothered by people who are drunk, and they sit next to you. That is why you should eat at home.

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This is my first thread, I am practicing writing essay. Could anyone give me some advise about this essay. Thank you very much!
akbartaufiq25 7 / 81 54  
Jun 30, 2016   #2
Hi Quan, welcome to the team! I hope that you gain many improvements from the EssayForum as we strive to give accurate criticism to all members who are in need of writing assistance.

I appreciate your effort in practicing your writing, because you know, become a good writer is really helpful. With regards to your essay, I have several notes for you as follows:

Actually, your ideas are good, but you need to link the information from one sentence to each other. For instance, in the introductory statement, you said that it is better for people to prepare their food at home, however, you jumped the ideas in the next sentence. You need to put a sentence which indicates that eating at home is safer than eating at the restaurant. You may consider the following example of mine:

"The trend of eating at restaurants becomes popular as people prefer to something instant recently. Still, there are some who prefer to prepare their food at home. In my view, cooking at home has more advantages than waiting your food at the restaurants for two major considerations."

As you can see, the first two sentences are the introductory part of the main idea (bold sentence). The ideas are well-structured and linked each other. Also, it is easy to control the ideas since I only mention TWO reasons of why people should eat and prepare their food at home.

There you have it Quan. I know that it is quite challenging during the first time practice writing, but no need to worry, joining the EssayForum means that you open a new path to gain more understanding about writing as well as improve your writing skill further. Best regards!
OP SlimeTim 1 / 2 2  
Jun 30, 2016   #3
Thank akbartaufiq25 for you advise. I very appreciates it, I will try not to made the same mistake as this one again!

This is my new start sentence:Nowadays there are a lot of restaurants around the world and people are enjoying eating in the restaurant because they are lazy of making their own food. But according to me, I would like to prefer eating at home. I think that eating in home is safer for us because we know what we are going to cook.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 30, 2016   #4
Hi Quan, WLECOME to the Essay Forum Team, I'm glad every time we welcome new members of this wonderful and very useful website, we strive to provide you with the most comprehensive and objective criticism that will eventually enhance your essay and future writing projects.

Having said that, please find the suggested corrections below;

- According to meIn my opinion ,
- I would like to prefer eating at home.
- I think that eating inat home
- buy aremay be fresh or not?
- Nowadays, restaurants may buy the rotten
- thingsproduce like dead fish
- and thebe made into sauce from rubbish .
- for your own good.

There you have it Quan, overall, the essay is written fairly well, as you've mentioned this is your first thread and you are practicing the English language in a for of writing, I do suggest as well that you practice it as much and as often as you can, writing, reading and in your daily lives. I hope the above corrections helped and are useful in your revision.


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