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IELTS- Education- should graduates pay the full cost of their education?


callmedumbazz 3 / 4  
Aug 2, 2011   #1
It is right that university graduates should earn more money than less well educated people, but they should pay the full cost of their education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is no doubt that university graduates deserve higher salaries than the people who are less well educated. However, it is disagreed that they should pay the full cost of their courses.

There are several reasons why graduates from universities should earn good salaries. First, they have invested time and effort into gaining their qualifications. Different courses have different duration but usually university students have to study 3 or 4 years to be qualified and graduate. Second, graduates would have knowledge, skills and training required for important jobs after a long time of studying at universities. Third, they can prove themselves to be a valued asset to society with their capabilities. Some of them are able to do the jobs that not many people can do. Thus, they should be paid more than the persons who only finish year 12 or diploma.

Graduates should not be required to pay the full cost of education. That is because, if university students have to pay upfront the full amount of tuition fee for each semester or term, this fee could be too expensive and will deter many young people from going to university. In a bad scenario, students borrow money to pay the cost of their education, and then they will have a huge debt. To get the money to pay the school fees, some students even have to work in construction sites where they would have to do heavy jobs and exert themselves physically very hard.

In conclusion, for all of the reasons above, it is concluded that university graduates should be paid good salaries but they should not be required to pay the full cost of their studies. It is hoped that governments will open some funds where students can borrow from and then the salaries they receive when they work will be partly deducted to pay back their debts.

Hi all, please help to correct my writing. Thanks.

EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Aug 2, 2011   #2
However it is disagreed that they should have to pay the full cost of their courses.

Different courses have different durations but usually university students have to study for three or four years to be qualified to graduate.

Third, they can prove themselves to be a valued assets to society with their capabilities.

Some of them are able to do the jobs that not many people can do. Thus, they should be paid more than the persons who only finish year 12 or have only a high school diploma.

...some students even have to work in construction sites where they would have to do heavy jobs and exert themselves physically very hard.---- At least it's better than having to ask, "do you want fries with that?"

It is hoped that governments will open some funds where students can borrow from and then the salaries they receive when they work will be partly deducted to pay back their debts.---I'm pretty sure this is what happens now, so we have student loans.

Good luck in school!

:)
EricJ - / 48  
Aug 2, 2011   #3
Hi Wolverine,

Since you were asked to what extent you agree or disagree with the statement, you should write the essay in the first person. Unless your teacher has told you to write in the third person, you should write this essay with sentences in the first person -- "I think that..." "I disagree with the statement that..."

A sentence like "It is disagreed that.." sucks. It's awkward. No native speaker of English would ever write that unless he or she was a robot or a Congressional staffer.

Try: I disagree that students should have to pay the full cost of their educations. I think that education should be paid for by taxing people who are not smart enough to get into college. It will take years for these 7-11 clerks to figure out what we are doing to them, and by the time they do, I will have graduated.

Instead of "it is hoped", get in on the action, brother. Try: I hope that the government will make money available for students to borrow and ...

Good luck! It is hoped that your teacher will like your essay. It is hoped that my advice will help you...

Eric


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