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Education Is the Key to Breaking the Cycle of Violence - Summary article


David54 15 / 22 1  
Sep 15, 2016   #1
"School should be on the front lines of peace, not war". Forest Whitetaker, an actor and UNESCO special envoy, and Irina Bokova, Director-General of UNESCO, they said. This article stories about their experience in Sudan, two years ago when they crossed south Sudan together and saw the impact of conflict on school education. Nowdays, education is vital role which is takes leading role of government to educate people to nurture peace. To tackle this case, government must commit to protect schools and universities and not use them for military purposes. On the other hand, government is responsible to support education system that reach out to all groups and teach about human rights to all societies. In the end, hopefully the power of education may give peace to young minds, provide a sense of safety, normal life and dreams.
MingWaiS - / 3  
Sep 15, 2016   #2
... front lines of peace, not war, " said Forest Whitetaker, an actor ...

This article tells about their experience in Sudan, when two years ago ...
Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Sep 15, 2016   #3
Hello

It'll be better if you restructure some of your sentences as suggested below:

"School should [...] According to Forest Whitetaker... and Irina Bokova: "School should...".
This article [...] dwells upon the experiences of both of the mentioned individuals in Sudan, where they studied the effects of war on the quality of local education.

Nowadays, [...] commonly assumed that education promotes peace.
To tackle this case [...] This is the reason why the government must ensure that no schools and universities are being used to shelter guerilla fighters.

On the other hand [...] The government is also responsible for providing equal access to education for all of the country's citizens.

I hope this came of help. Regards.


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