Jen, I'll be offering some examples of how to better say your paragraphs below. That will be in a separate comment line from my analysis of your paragraphs :-)
Eating food among nice surrounding is happy time for everyone such as having romantic dinner in luxurious hotel or having breakfast in the garden. Although I like to eat food at home more than do outsides for several reasons.
- Jen, do me a favor here ok? Try to clean up your introduction by adding the necessary components. This includes the restated prompt and method of discussion prior to your opinion. Don't get me wrong, your introduction is good. It can just be better :-)- People always enjoy eating in luxurious surroundings. That is why restaurants are designed to make the dining experience look and feel good. As far as I am concerned though, nothing beats eating at home for a number of reasons.The first reason is that I can use this moment with all members in family by buying raw material to cook, cooking, eating and sharing problems together during eating. That time help our relationship more close. In my case, every Sunday is my family day. We did not eat outsides but we cook favorite dinner by ourselves and eating in a dining room or home's garden.
- Food preparation at home is always a bonding experience for most families. Marketing for the food and preparing it creates a bonding moment between family members that normally extends to the dining table, where the pleasant conversation is continued as the deliciously prepared meal is shared by the family members. At least that is how my family shares food every Sunday. We cook the food and then shared the meal in the dining room or garden.Secondly, it is saving money because I can find most raw materials to cook around my home including home-grown vegetables or egg of my hen. We can save money to do more important other activities such as buying new furniture, supporting summer trip and expanding the yard. Moreover, we do not lose expense to transport to the restaurants outdoor.
- Eating in, as some people prefer to call it, also serves an economic purpose for the person or family as the food budget can be stretched to cover a whole day of meals rather than just one dining experience in the restaurant. Thus freeing up the finances for other more important needs such as paying bills or saving for a new home item.- Jen, you can still expand upon this reason. It just takes a little research :-) This is a very good reason that can use a second example to make the point more reasonable.In conclusion, eating food in home has many advantages for family relationship because it helps support good relationship among parents and their children in family. In addition, it also helps reduce needless expenses of family in the same time.
- Good conclusion. You perfectly summed up the prompt, summary of facts, and your opinion in a mere 2 sentences. Add another one to make it 3 sentences which is the minimum number of sentences per paragraph in an essay :-)