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Effect of Single-gender schools - wrtiting task 2 for IELTS


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Oct 7, 2017   #1
Question:
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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.

Answer:
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single or a mixed gender school?



In different parts of the world,it is often decided by the parents whether to admit their kids to a single gender school or a mixed gender school. It is considered by many that studying in a all boys or all girls school has some negative impacts on a child's life when they are grown up. I completely agree with this notion and in support of my view I will discuss the problems faced by both male and female students in this essay.

One serious problem faced by the boys having studied in single gender schools is uneasiness while communicating to a girl. As a student spends a vast majority of his life in school and in an all boys school he can only get along with students of the same gender, he faces difficulties interacting with girls. Due to this many boys suffer from severe mental pressure when they enter college and see that the boys coming from a co-educational background have a better rapport with girls than they have. It badly affects them at such a critical juncture of their lives.

Similarly, girls coming from a single-sex school feel nervous when they enter college or join the workforce which have people from both the genders. As they have not had the experience of working and competing with males,they feel dominated by the large number of men in college or workplace. They always prefer to be surrounded by female colleagues and try to avoid getting along easily with men ,which does not contribute to a healthy work environment.

In conclusion, I agree with the notion that children studying in single gender schools face a lot of problems in life in terms of communication and confidence, compared to the ones studying in mixed gender schools.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 10,091 3252  
Oct 7, 2017   #2
Riya, the complete prompt for this essay requires you to discuss both points of view and then deliver a discussion of your opinion. What you discussed in the essay focuses solely on your point of view. As such, your response will be considered only partially correct and receive the appropriate low score for the essay. The moment that you chose not to properly represent the instruction sentence in the opening statement, you already got the lowest possible TA score for this essay. Then the tangential discussion further lowered the TA score. This has created an extremely high possibility that, when combined with your low scores for the remaining criteria, that the work you did will not get a passing score. Always remember, the original prompt provides you with the outline for the discussion all you have to do is follow the format it is presented in. In this instance you had to make sure that your body of paragraphs contained:

1. A supporting point of view
2. A contradicting point of view
3. Your personal statement

Since this essay focused only on your personal statement, you cannot get a high, passing score for this essay. The prompt requirement must be followed at all times if you are to gain a passing score. The problem, is that you do not seem to properly assess the prompt and its requirements. If you do not take the time to review the essay requirements, you may end up always just submitting partially correct essays such as this one.
OP IELTS_Academic 4 / 7 2  
Oct 7, 2017   #3
@Holt,

I am really sorry that I missed writing the question fully. The complete question is:

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.

To what extent do you agree?


Could you please tell me if my essay is fine for the question mentioned above? Please tell me if I need to make any changes?


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