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[Ielts] effects of living longer for individuals and society.


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Apr 23, 2011   #1
Pls help to check.Thank you all.

People are living longer but increased life expectancy has many implications for the aging individuals and for society as a whole .
What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?


As a result of advancement in medical technology ,people nowadays are able to live longer than they used to be.However,the influences attended by the increasing life expectancy are becoming hot-bottom issues because both individuals and society are largely impacted in varied respects.

Obviously,individuals are the main beneficiaries of rising life expectancy.In fact,living longer provides them many advantages economically and spiritually.For example,elderly people nowadays are required to retire later because many countries are proposing to postpone the age of retirement due to the aging problems.That is to say,individuals are able to get more wages which help them to better the economic situation.Furthermore,living longer also offer people more chances to enjoy the lives or realize the plans that can not be achieved in the past.For instance,many elderly people tend to travel around after retirement,being a important way which helps to enrich the later years of life.

On the other hand,aging issues influence the society in different aspects as well,profitably and adversely.First of all,government benefits from these tendencies because more tax could be levied on from working elderly but pays less in pensions, which help to alleviate the financial strain of government.For the second,employers are able to develop faster as more people are engage in working position,besides that,old people tend to possess more experience in jobs,being brain powers for companies.Lastly,people do not profit from the aging problems without expenses.The increasing life expectancy bring into the other problems such as overpopulation,the tension of resources allocation and job unemployment,all of these are worsening the development of our society.

To conlclude,aging issues are continue to exert effects on entire human races,despite willing or not.Whether it would be beneficial or adverse for us is not yet to know and hinge on the efforts that the government would make.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Apr 24, 2011   #2
However,the influences attended by the consequences of increasing life expectancy are becoming hot-bottom issues because both individuals and society are largely impacted in varied respects.----You have a nice way of writing!

No need to say "For the second." Just do this:
Second, employers are able to develop faster ...

To conlclude,aging issues are continue to exert effects on entire human race, whether we like it or not.

Whether it would be beneficial or adverse for us is not yet to know, and the outcome hinges on the efforts that the government would make.

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