many people prefer to laborwork only for a limited time in a year.
... Pay attention to my correction. This sounds better
To begin with the advantages, when people work for a short duration and engage in their interested activities for the rest of the time, it helps them to alleviate their stress level.
.... sentence is two long and you can easily break it up to two or more :) Or you can sum up present like this;
To begin with people can lead a stress free lives if they work for a limited time. This is a great advantage.For instance, those who work in coal mines or ships usually takestake long breaks from their job.
.... Pay attention to the corrections I made here.... It is better to have it said in plural form.
Good body paras... You give a very valid reason and present a specific example to support it . Very Good :)