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Eight Easy Ways Lead to Success


yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Dec 2, 2016   #1
There are eight ways to create success in the life according to seven years of research and 500 interviews. First of all is the passion according to Freeman Thomas who talk about passion can bring to the success because do it for love. Secondly, Rupert Murdoach said that the success must do with hard work because nothing comes easily. Thirdly, put the nose down in good something to get the success and practice it, based on Alex Garden's says. Then focus, in Noman Jewison's view who is think all with focusing on one thing. David Gallo. The next, Push the self, particularly physically and mentally, also pass the shyness and self-doubt. Then, Sherwin Nuland talked that the another way which can serve others something of value. The Ideas come from creativity skills according to Bill Gates's speak. Kraus says that persistence is the total one reason for the success which it gotta persist pass failure.

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Anna94 47 / 56 3  
Dec 2, 2016   #2
Hello,

First of all is the passion according to ...
First of all, according to Freeman Thomas who says that passion can bring people to the success by doing it with love

... success must do with hard workHARDWORKING because nothing comes easily.

Thirdly, put the nose down in good something (SOMETHING GOOD ) to get the success ...

The next, Push the self, particularly physically and mentallyin physical and mental , also pass ...

You have to consistent in using tenses, since this talk i'm sure running altogether, but your tenses sometimes 'present simple' and 'past tense'. Those make readers confuse.

Gluck^^~
alfinkurnia 33 / 47  
Dec 2, 2016   #3
Hello Yurike, this is my advice for you.

There are eight ways...>>I think your sentence have many gramatical error,you should alter with this ( ... to create success in the life according research for seven years who ...

... can bring to the success because he love his job

I think you must attention your grammar and spelling. thanks
septiadara29 48 / 67 9  
Dec 2, 2016   #4
Hello! I will give you some opinions about your summary.

(1) ... in the life according to seven years ofor a longitudinal research and the results from 500 interviews to respondents.

(2) First of all isTo begin with,the passion according to Freeman Thomas who talk aboutthe passion can bring ...

(3) ... that the success must do withfollowed by hard work because ...

(4) Thirdly, put the nose down ...
Thirdly, based on Alex Garden, he says that put the nose down is one of good ways to get success
MRPRESIDEN 2 / 3  
Dec 2, 2016   #5
There are eight ways (...) according to THE seven years

First of all is the passion according to Freeman ...

FOCUS ON MEANING I THINK THAT YOUR SENTENCE IN THE BEGINNING INAPPROPRIATE
LET ME REVISE >> first of all, Freeman Thomas talked about passion can leads to the success because do it for love.

Secondly, Rupert Murdoach said that the success must ( must can be shaged have to) do with (...) nothing comes easily.

... to get the success and practice it, based on Alex Garden's says Alex Gardens, said.

Then focus, in Noman Jewison's view who is double verb (think and is i suggest delete is) think all with focusing on one the thing.David Gallo. ???

The next, Push theby self, particularly in particular physically and mentally, also pass the shyness and self-doubtas well .

Kraus says said that persistence is ...
AK354 7 / 8 1  
Dec 2, 2016   #6
Hello Yurike,
Here my advice for you

... to Freeman Thomas who talks about passion

Secondly, Rupert Murdoach said that the success must do with hard working because nothing comes easily (You must understand position noun and adverb, using appropiat words in right place)

The i deas come from creativity skills ... >>please attention your capital letters


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